HopperWolf Posted February 8, 2003 Report Posted February 8, 2003 This is where life begins, In the same old way While she talks So ordinary, The words that touch The heart of any man. This is how life began, As the coulds fall back With the words So full of meaning; The truth of life, For us all to see. This is why life begins, We’re all the same, Things we do: Extrordinary, Power to touch, The truth of any man. This is for whom life extends, Power to be held, None the same, All ordinary, Unique for one, To touch each other.
Mira Posted February 9, 2003 Report Posted February 9, 2003 Could you be a little less good, you making the rest of us look bad
Rune Posted February 12, 2003 Report Posted February 12, 2003 I like the echo of the first sentance through each section and then the sudden change at the end. its always been a technique I thought was interesting if pulled off correctly. The reader gets settled into a reading pattern and is then suddenly switched rather violently to make the final statement of the poem bold. Good job Hopper. ^__^ Thanks for sharing.
Archaneus Posted February 12, 2003 Report Posted February 12, 2003 I LOVE IT! I really like the way you wrote it. I'm with Rune. I like the way you worded it. Grea Job .
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