Falcon2001 Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 It's all falling down like rain Impending doom, expanding pain I don't want to hurt again But what do I know about the rain? I see a hazy fading sense Made my last inference Time to get down off the fence But what do I know about the rain? Dripping down my flushed neck A train of emotions now a wreck Supermagik senses now on deck But what do I know about the rain? It falls and dies in a quickened heat I feel the life pulse beneath my feet I want to love and feel the beat But what do I know about the rain? I know the truth and the lies I feel the beat as it slowly dies I feel the fire inside your eyes But what do I know about the rain?
Tasslehoff Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Heya Falcon, Great Job. Glad to see you posting!
Rune Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 wow, that was really good. I like the repetition of "the rain?" at the end of each line. Reminded me of a chant in a way, and in reading I sped up each line as I went along which really added to the chanting feel. Thank you for sharing.
Falcon2001 Posted February 5, 2003 Author Report Posted February 5, 2003 Yay. I can post again ;; *sighs* I'm soo tired, and this poem really sucked. Oh well. c'est la vie.
Archaneus Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 If this poem sucked, I can't wait to see your good stuff. I really liked this poem, especially since it's a lot like my own, lots of use of symbolism, I think. Lol. Really good stuff.
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