jamesdevin Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Bitch What a bitch, I should hit you, but I'm a man, so I won't hurt you. you don't deserve love, not even to be loved, for your not honest, your just a bitch. you can die for all I care, you can get murdered, or raped, I won't shed a tear. I don't care for your kind, you know which, liars are worth squat to me, you bitch, bitch, bitch. James Devin
DoomGaze Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Gets it point across.... i can sense anger in the air.. all the better to express yourself with.
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Ouch. Since I tend to feel others innards more strongly than my own, I have trouble being judgemental enough to write a poem like this. I can imagine that it's very cathartic though.
Guest Enter Your Name Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 I'm pretty sure it's not good news if you feel someone's else's innards. Not for them, anyway
Justin Silverblade Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 (edited) Powerful. Too much so for my liking, but powerful nonetheless. If the purpose was to convey hatred, you certainly succeeded. I disagree with the message, and am sorry for you if these are actually your feelings towards anyone, but it certainly is poetry, no doubt about it. Good to see a new face sharing with us. Please continue to post. - Justin Edited February 5, 2003 by Justin Silverblade
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Depending on what's inside the person, it's not too fun for me to feel their innards either. One reason I encourage people to love and grow - makes them so much easier to be around...
Rune Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 hmm, very bold and direct. Painful..on both ends. Scary as well..because i sense rage..more than anger.
Archaneus Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Probably the most anger I've seen in any poem so far on here, but I'm a new meber so waht do I know? You really succeeded in showing how much you hate this individual.
Vlad Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 This is really harsh, and like someone else said, a bit to powerful for me. Too much anger, too much hate No girl will go with me, on a date A lesson to be learned.
reverie Posted February 5, 2003 Report Posted February 5, 2003 Two words.... "punching bag" it works... revery the dreamlost "...waste my days" weezer the dream continues...
Blondemoon Posted February 6, 2003 Report Posted February 6, 2003 I have to agree with reverie there....buy a punching bag. they really do work...as long as you use them.
The Portrait of Zool Posted February 6, 2003 Report Posted February 6, 2003 Justin, being extremely hurt by someone will be your test. Jamesdevin, you will be sorely tested by someone who trusts you.
HopperWolf Posted February 7, 2003 Report Posted February 7, 2003 just a thought, are these your actual emotions? or is it a situational thing? I know I have written and toyed with several ideas from the perspective of some other people. The themes are universal, but some people take them to greater extends so that we no longer recognise them. Still, they share the same roots, and so you can gain understanding. Could be way off base though and you might just have that much rage. Still, not gonna judge you on that either, poetry can be a very brief burst of these emotions and as such, stronger than we will really feel them. I would be more disturbed if you feel that way about this person frequently or consistently though.
Ozymandias Posted February 7, 2003 Report Posted February 7, 2003 What stuck out for me was the refusal to strike her because she's a woman, even though the opinion given on her was that the speaker likes her less than dirt. A thought-provoking glimpse into the calm thoughts behind a red haze...
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