DoomGaze Posted February 1, 2003 Report Posted February 1, 2003 Forever Beautiful --------------------------------------- Trees sway from side to side, at a delicate pace, The sun rises ever so slowly above the clouds so high, Birds flutter after a wind they cannot give chase, Leaving one area, without saying goodbye. But still they fly free, and onward they go, No regrets, not looking behind. Like a stream, one way it flows, Driven by instinct, it's own path it must find. But one must know the price to pay, For all beautiful things have a cost. We slowly destroy Nature's way And when it is too late, all is lost. Mountains become no more than piles of sand, Blue skies transformed into crimson fire. Trees turn to ash by the touch of a hand Destruction and death now takes the place of desire. All we can do, is watch our world fall into a dip, Taking a dive into a black abyss, And I for once will not let it slip, But alone I can't, so this world I will miss.
Tasslehoff Posted February 1, 2003 Report Posted February 1, 2003 WoW.. Great work my grasshopper, Great work!
Peredhil Posted February 1, 2003 Report Posted February 1, 2003 Nice imagery. intense warning. Don't underestimate the power of one person to make a change...
Canid Posted February 1, 2003 Report Posted February 1, 2003 Canid closes her eyes and howls her solemn agreement. Nicely written.
Gwaihir Posted February 1, 2003 Report Posted February 1, 2003 Awesome poem. Personally, I think the way you change the order of the sentence can make it feel a bit ackward,b ut I dont' know if you want criticsm, and anyway it's a good piece
Rune Posted February 3, 2003 Report Posted February 3, 2003 Rune stumbles into the room, stepping on the hem of her pants (which are just way too big for her little legs) and almost falls forward. Taking a seat behind Gwaihir she adjusts herself into the large chair which appears to dwarf her tiny frame. Folding her hands politely on her lap she listens to the presentation and then claps with the rest of the crowd when the author is finished. She walks forward and waits in line patiently to express her gratitude for the presentation and the chance to experience the intense message in the poem. She looks up at Doomgaze with bright blue innocent eyes as a single tear rolls down her cheek. Taking the author's hand in hers, she touches it to her forehead and then turns to leave. Her voice can be heard telepathically as she walks out of the room. "Thank you for sharing your poem..and your insight Doomgaze. I was truely touched by the words and am moved by the intensity. Please post more, I look forward to experiencing it."
Archaneus Posted February 3, 2003 Report Posted February 3, 2003 Being an elf I have a great appreciation for nature so I love that somebody wrote something displaying how we destroy the world. I was thinking about writing something like this for a while. You gave me the final push. Thank you. *Bows in respect and leaves*
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