Archive Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 Balladore Visitor Posts: 4 (10/21/01 9:31:56 pm) Reply Untitled story/novel -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Pro~ I'm really hoping that this will draw out into a long story or a novel, but I have no idea where its going... I just started it tonight, and I'll only write a little bit of my ideas... Once again, Comments welcome of any sort. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The thunder of his horses hooves was steady, always drumming. He rode on at a gallop... he had to get there as soon as he could... He had to deliver the bad news to the queen and her son. As he rode, he couldn't help but feel a pity for this land... scorched as if the entire countryside had been thrown into hell... Well... if Marlaunt succeeded, this land and hell could very well be synonymous. Farms lay abandoned, still smoking from the batallion that had marched through here to Capitol only 2 days ago... the same batallion that now held King Synchron captive. Focus, focus... he had to get there. The map he had gotten from the herald-dispatcher had proven utterly useless, showing only landmarks (all of which had been burned) and the road, which was straight until a bend in the road... but he could see that bend up ahead. He was almost to the cottage, and he prayed to Sun that it hadn't been seen and captured on that day... There! there it was, he could see smoke coming from the chiminey. So they were alive... at least one of them was. He spurred his horse for the final drive. The sooner he gave the Royals his news, the sooner he could return to Capitol and help the main force. As he reached the cottage, he reigned in his horse and dismounted. He looked around the small thatch-roof cottage, but saw no one. Suddenly, a dagger flew through the air and burried itself into tough leather saddle, and the herald screamed in fright. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I wanted to end at a suspenseful point, so there ya go :-)! (plus, I need to decide where to go from there :-))
Archive Posted January 30, 2003 Author Report Posted January 30, 2003 Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 80 (10/21/01 10:29:42 pm) Reply Re: Untitled story/novel -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Okay, so the herald is going from the capital to a cottage where the Queen and her son are? Hmmm... now was the dagger hurled by the Queen or someone allied with her, or is the rest of the royal family dead? Say more! As a note, you might want to flesh out the herald more in the next sections- what he looks like, who he is, his past, why he is where he is... =)
Archive Posted January 30, 2003 Author Report Posted January 30, 2003 Balladore Visitor Posts: 5 (10/21/01 10:47:31 pm) Reply Re: Untitled story/novel -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Pro~ Ah, but the herald becomes unimportant soon, as you will see... just a conveyor of my story for the moment... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "You move again and my next dagger will be aimed for your heart" came a gruff voice from the shadows of the cottage, accompanied by a man stepping out into the light. The sun glinted off his armor- the finest made by the King's dwarven smiths, the herald recognized it, so obviously this man was friend. "Peace... I come from Capitol, I'm a herald carrying important news-" and stopped speaking as the knight flicked his wrist to throw his knife. The herald screamed as he saw it flying through the air, quickly... drawing nearer to his face at lightning speed... until it was destroyed in a shower of sparks a few inches from his face. "Cardisk! Stand down, he's wearing his marker, can't you see that?! I'd think you have rocks in that head of yours rather than brains!" came a voice from the other side of the cottage... and another mysterious man stepped out, with his eyes flashing menacingly. He wore long flowing robes of a midnight blue, and carried a staff. Now, this person he recognized; it was the King's personal sorcerer, Sonalf. At the mage's appearance, Cardisk stalked off, grumbling as he went, his armor clinking oddly all the time. "Pay him no heed. Come inside and deliver your message, the lady Aurora will be anxious to hear from you, I'm sure. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ OOC: Well, I'm tired, so I'll write more tomorrow, but I'm done for now.
Archive Posted January 30, 2003 Author Report Posted January 30, 2003 Balladore Visitor Posts: 6 (10/22/01 11:05:46 pm) Reply Re: Untitled story/novel -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The three walked inside to the all-purpose room of the cottage, finding it empty. Out back, though, Queen Aurora stood over a cooking fire, and her son Horace continually stocked it with wood he gathered from the trees concealing the cottage. They were obviously preparing the noontide meal, and by the smell of it, were almost done. The three sat down to wait, and Sonalf got something for the weary herald to drink. He took the cup from the archmage, and thanked him gratefully. "So, Herald, what is this news you bring from Capitol?" The herald paused for a moment, hesitating... "I'd rather wait until the Queen and her son were here, as it regards them mainly." "What?! I'll have you know I was the King's main millitary advisor, before I was sent off to guard the Queen and her son!" "Hush, Cardisk! Wait for luncheon, and Queen Aurora," which was to come sooner than they thought... a moment later, the two (Horace and his mother Aurora) came inside and served a pot of soup, and fetched a loaf of bread from a cupboard. Her eyes were bright, as she expected the news to be good, and her long chestnut hair fell well below her shoulders, falling into her eyes and face from time to time. Her son had the same eyes and hair, but definately the chiselled features of his father. He was a bit more wary of the traveler, and assumed that the news was bad due to his expression. They ate in awkward, scattered conversation, as if they couldn't find anything to talk about, but it seemed to be agreed that the news wouldn't be given until after the meal. Finally, they finished, and the herald decided that he had waited long enough. "Your majesties Queen Aurora, Prince Horace, I come with a message directly addressed to you from Capitol, which was besieged 2 days ago by Marlaunt and his troops. Unfortunately, I regret to tell you that Capitol has fallen, and King Synchron has been taken captive to their brutal forces..." his voice trailed off at the end at the looks given him all around the table. Aurora was heartbroken, and began to cry, whilst her son tried to console her even though he was near tears himself. Cardisk looked to be in shock, and Sonalf hid his expression well, the diplomat that he was. "Well, I assume you need to get back to capitol to help the force re-group," Cardisk said distractedly. "Yes, sir, I will... and I bid you all goo-" He cut himself off here, realising too late that it wasn't a very good day at all.
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