Passionsrejected05 Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 The Tunnel- You start walking through. Amid an endless void. Where’s the light at the end? The pain in stronger. The end longer. Everything you see is getting smaller and smaller. Closer and Closer and closer. The air is wrapping around you like a noose. The fear is eating you alive. You hear shrill screams, the kind that tear apart your mind. You spin around crying out. Then you realize they’re coming from you. Welcome to hell.
Rahsash Geldich Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 Very nightmarish with good imagery. You can almost feel the cold hands creeping up.
Rune Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 "The air is wrapping around you like a noose." That's a very very effective and image instensive line. I think I actually kind of took another quick breath when I read that just to make sure things were alright and that nothing was trying to get me. Great job Passion! Thank you for sharing.
Peredhil Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 Heh. For some reason, I thought of childbirth - from the kid's point of view... It makes no sense to leave a perfectly warm supportive environment for a cold harsh world...
The Portrait of Zool Posted January 30, 2003 Report Posted January 30, 2003 Well Pered, when the lease is up, the lease is up - time to move on to begger digs. Ah yes - the blackness. Cause of so much frenetic empty 'doing'. Very Good PR05, it appears you gathered the courage to shine a flashlight in that blackness and illuminate your own fear - and the opening to the dark halls beyond. Keep going.
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