jonathan_wolfe Posted January 20, 2003 Report Posted January 20, 2003 [Limit] Start smooth, moving along simple, easy... cruise accelerate, kickback... gravity gravity the wrong way turning, faster... heavy, sliding back again, the cruise so much easier back again, nothing comfortable at seven gee loops, barrel rolls, cut-fades the dogfight white tracers, smoking trails impact...? too far... can't.. yes.. Silence. *edit* I know this may sound offensive, but I just recently got creative and started writing poems like crazy... I'm hungering for feedback, what I received was very truely positive... but I need more.. please! Jonathan go sleep now...
Gyrfalcon Posted January 20, 2003 Report Posted January 20, 2003 Gyrfalcon laughs You've become a response junkie, I see. The half-elf smiles, then prepares to respond Wow, probably the shortest (in word count) description of a dogfight that's even engaged me- good job! I can even see the fighters manuvering in my mind's eye- good going.
Rune Posted January 20, 2003 Report Posted January 20, 2003 Rune nods to indicate approval.. Granted she is pretty darn short and you may not have noticed her nodding.
jonathan_wolfe Posted January 20, 2003 Author Report Posted January 20, 2003 Jonathan laughs and thanks his old friend Gyr for the feedback, then Rune the newcomer for responding to ever darned new thing in the Banquet hall. "Indeed, I got what I seeked, especially with the help of Rune. I got my feedback and it's given me the confidence to continue my work and go at it like never before." He rexamines the poem for himself, appreciating his work "Did you know this was originally a driving poem? It only turned into a dogfight at the third or fourth verse, when it seemed to just morph into it. I guess I like dogfights more than racecars. Doesn't help that I'm addicted to Macross Plus, those were the best dogfights you'll ever see in anime." Jonathan grins and goes back to his poem writing with a strange exclamation, "ph34r th3 p03t1c 0n3s"
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