Zariah Posted January 18, 2003 Report Posted January 18, 2003 This is a story about a gal who learns to deal with her relationships. The dialogue in the ( ), represents her conversing with her inner consciousness. She grows from an immature gal to a young lady, no longer dependant for others to make her happy. Her imdependance marks the begining of being able to TRULY experience the lif she shall lead. I, myself, am an actress, so this could be performed as a skit, and probably improved,but I created this on a whim and decided to post it. Anger. Why? (Your paths lead in different directions.) Can't I keep him? (Not if you can't let him go.) I don't want to let go. I finally found what I want. (But are you really sure he's the one?) Yes, he's what I want forever!!! (WAKE UP and realize the truth!) STOP yelling at me, GO AWAY, he's mine! Resentment. I never asked to be in love. (It's a part of being human) I don't want to lose again. (You will, we ALL will.) I can't bear it. (Suck it up, kid) I HATE you, love. I DESPISE you, heart. This human emotion will destroy me. (Not if you don't let it) I regret ever loving anyone. Hope. (Well, maybe it's for the best.) I know it is, he needs a good start. Maybe it'll work out, even. (That depends on him, not you) I suppose it is all meant to be in the scheme of things, right? (Right.) Right.... I can always hope. Pain. These tears aren't even close to releasing my pain. My heart aches. I can't take this!It's not fair! (Life's not fair, get used to it.) Why me? Huh? What did I do to deserve this? I only wanted happiness, and now I suffer. (So what! So does everyone, why are you different?) But he was my everything, and it's all gonna go away. (Geez... I can't deal with this anymore, GET OVER it.) Depression. Who cares anymore. I'm going back to sleep. (You have to keep your own life.) Eh, whatever. Nothing matters. (YES, or else you wouldn't be avoiding it.) Whatever. (Whatever?!! You need to GROW up) Why? What's the use? To suffer more? (Yes, and to experience happiness, too.) It's all really pain. (How will you know if you don't try? Giving it a chance. Yeah, so I met this gal today at the coffee shop I go to. She and I talked a bit and decided to have lunch tomorrow. (Really? See, friends can fill that void.) I guess...who knows maybe she has a brother... (Oh great, here we go AGAIN....) No, no... I mean to hang with.. FRIENDS. I swear, I can be fine on my own. Really. (I knew you could, all along kid... You'll be just fine.) Okay. Yeah? I'm okay and you? (I'm great. How's the new job?) Good, good. A lotta work, but fufilling. I have this guy I'm seein'. He just popped up in my life. (Do you think it'll...??)- - I dunno, but I've learned to deal now. I've learned to deal. To go with the flow. To be okay.
Peredhil Posted January 19, 2003 Report Posted January 19, 2003 Intense. I could see this as a monolouge, with different colored spotlights for the inner dialogue. Might want to edit and clean up the spelling.
reverie Posted January 19, 2003 Report Posted January 19, 2003 i like it. revery the dreamlost "time need not be stopped nor revived..." the dream continues...
Gyrfalcon Posted January 19, 2003 Report Posted January 19, 2003 I think this is excellent- I can really get a sense of her growing up through the piece.
Wyvern Posted January 19, 2003 Report Posted January 19, 2003 A very original and well executed piece, Crowgirl. I can definitely see it being acted out on stage, which I'm certain would enhance its message even further. Well done! P.S: As Peredhil pointed out, you may want to edit some of the spelling in the "Pain" and "Okay" segments.
Zariah Posted January 19, 2003 Author Report Posted January 19, 2003 okay, thank you to all readers. I edited the grammer. I guess I didn't check it when I submitted it. (Hey, it was late and all). By clarification to certain peple, this has nothing to do with me. I was writing from a different persona. Okay, well keep on posting.
jonathan_wolfe Posted January 20, 2003 Report Posted January 20, 2003 The style, using a word then a paragraph about it Tis a good thing, a wonderful thing... Very well wrought.
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