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peredhil31

An Ancient Polite Bard

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(11/4/02 9:16:59 am)

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ezSupporter

WW/Natural Efficiency/Soaring Icarus

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I like the imagery, although at first reading it's leaving me with mixed visions.

 

On one level, I'm seeing an outeratmospheric installation, on another a metallic eruption from a jungle.

 

One thing to do, perhaps, might be to break up the reading by spacing and carriage returns, to make the reading easier.

 

I look forward to reading the next incarnation.

"A man's judgment is best when he can forget himself and any reputation he may have acquired and can concentrate wholly on making the right decisions."

-ADM Raymond A. Spruance

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