Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Report Posted January 15, 2003 peredhil31 An Ancient Polite Bard Posts: 1092 (10/9/02 9:35:52 am) Reply ezSupporter "Guess Who- A Duet" - Assembly Room -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- No guess, but that got rather gross... shudders
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 Zool47 Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards Posts: 674 (10/9/02 10:33:12 am) Reply Re: "Guess Who- A Duet" - Assembly Room -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Turgid oatmeal? Gelid vomitous puddle? A rather vivid play, with an unsettling focus. The only point is the shock value of sharing pain - and pain seems to be what the author(s) have in abundance. My advice (for what it's worth) is to try to write a little less for effect and try for some finesse. That way you won't overpower your audience and you WILL get more of your point across. Vivid impressions without resorting to a plethora of adjectives is the mark of a master. Email me for suggestions.
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