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peredhil31

An Ancient Polite Bard

Posts: 1092

(10/9/02 9:35:52 am)

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"Guess Who- A Duet" - Assembly Room

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No guess, but that got rather gross...

 

shudders

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Zool47

Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards

Posts: 674

(10/9/02 10:33:12 am)

Reply Re: "Guess Who- A Duet" - Assembly Room

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Turgid oatmeal? Gelid vomitous puddle?

 

A rather vivid play, with an unsettling focus. The only point is the shock value of sharing pain - and pain seems to be what the author(s) have in abundance.

 

My advice (for what it's worth) is to try to write a little less for effect and try for some finesse. That way you won't overpower your audience and you WILL get more of your point across. Vivid impressions without resorting to a plethora of adjectives is the mark of a master.

 

Email me for suggestions.

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