Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Report Posted January 15, 2003 Nyyark Page Posts: 208 (7/31/02 7:20:39 am) Reply The Game -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is an impressive poem, not because it is flashy, but because it gets it's point across so well. The flow was ery good, your meter allowing for easy rythem develope ment. You also were able to express your thoughts very well. Your beliefs came across clearly and understandably. However in I think it might be better to work 'The Game' into the last line rather than the 2nd to last, for while naming the 'The Game' love was conclusive, the offset of repitition left me feeling cheated. Well done, I hope you start posting more!
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