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gwaihir1

Elder of Lists and Poetry

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(4/24/02 4:50:11 am)

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NEAt poem! I'm trying to post comments more often when I reply to a poem saying how much I liked it so:

Reading it I wonder, the whole poem seems to be written, basically, in iambs, except for the first stanza. Is this on purpose? Line 14 seems to suggest that you're purposely writing iambs.

Either way though, the images are really clear, that's what to me makes this poem so beautiful.

---------- I want to be page 93 of Pineapples, the Avian Crows-Nyyark

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Ozymandias the Elder

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(4/24/02 5:50:36 pm)

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Right here is a perfect example of the advantages of working with someone over the internet. Gwaihir can't see me run for my dictionary as soon as "iambs" and "stanzas" are mentioned.

 

To answer your question Gwai, yes, the layout *was* intentional. Did I intentionally use actual poem structure? Not really. {:>)

 

First a noun like "masterpiece" is used to describe one of my poems, and now the adjective "beautiful"?

AND I got a Cyril Darkcloud reply?

 

Ozymandias carefully, one by one, sets all his pretensions of dignity aside. Then he dances around the room, waving his arms.

 

YayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYayYa

yYayYayYayYay!

 

Sobering immediately after doing a few laps, Ozy picks up his pretensions and fixes them back into place.

 

Thank you very much.

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Zool47

Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards

Posts: 351

(4/24/02 6:49:42 pm)

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Can I critique your reply?

 

It was VERY entertaining, absolutely wonderful!

 

Yes, we all love you Ozy.

~Zool~

 

Ancient, The Pen is Mightier than the Sword.

Bard of Terra, Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards.

Elder than dirt, more foolish than a jester, able to trip over the smallest logic in a single step. It's... Oh, you know.

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Ozymandias the Elder

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(4/30/02 5:12:55 pm)

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Ozymandias looks at Zool askance before cannoning into the taller man, knocking him to the ground, and administering an appreciative noogie.

 

Aw, shucks, ya big lug. You shouldn't have.

 

Edited by: Ozymandias the Elder at: 4/30/02 5:43:34 pm

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Zool47

Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards

Posts: 366

(4/30/02 5:49:52 pm)

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"Heh - thanks."

 

After his severe tousling, Zool gets a prosthesis resembling his former dignity and straps it in place. Taking a tentative step, he mumbles, "It doesn't work the same, but the old one always just got in the way anyhoo."

 

Jumping spastically, he shouts, "Ozy rocks!"

 

 

 

 

 

~Zool~

 

Ancient, The Pen is Mightier than the Sword.

Bard of Terra, Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards.

Elder than dirt, more foolish than a jester, able to trip over the smallest logic in a single step. It's... Oh, you know.

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