Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Report Posted January 15, 2003 Bhurin Initiate Posts: 16 (1/1/02 12:50:50 pm) Reply Shattered Night -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Banquet Hall Nyyark First off, let me say that I loved your continuous use of metaphors and personifacation throughout this piece. Few people would (or could) write a poem with nearly all of its devices sewn in metaphor. When I started reading this poem, I feared that it would be about a reused message (that of hope and endurance), but the style in which you presented it was subtle and well phrased. I greatly enjoyed this piece.
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 756 (1/1/02 6:25:31 pm) Reply ezSupporter Shattered Night -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Very Nicely done. I agree with Bhurin. Note, you need an apostrophe in sun's in the line Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- the suns burning -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Again, well done. -P
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 152 (1/1/02 10:50:00 pm) Reply Re: Shattered Night -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *applauds* I like this.
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 gwaihir1 Poet Posts: 62 (1/2/02 1:58:21 pm) Reply Re: Shattered Night -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- nice.
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