Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Report Posted January 15, 2003 peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 751 (12/31/01 7:26:51 am) Reply ezSupporter Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Assembly Room, Bhurin Very well done. Like all your works I've read so far, the scene descriptions are vivid enough I feel as though I'm watching them on a a movie screen. The use of the word "cometh" seems misplaced to my 'inner ear' as I read. (I like to read a loud.) I'd thought in the King James English the 'th' replaced 's' such that cometh would be comes, but I haven't checked. Keep them coming - you have great talent! -Peredhil
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 Bhurin Initiate Posts: 14 (12/31/01 1:02:35 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Having reread the story, Bhurin sheepishly smiles. "I think your right. I guess I got a little dramatic there. Oh well, no one ever said the Gods were perfect..."
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 149 (12/31/01 4:15:17 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *Gyr applauds* Very good... I especially liked the poetry, though its strange that the evil god was the one speaking in poetry while the good goddess was the big booming voice and normal sentances. I don't know, i just always thought that poetry was more.... light-hearted? Hmm... can't think of the words, but more connected to the 'good' side.
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Posted January 15, 2003 Balladore Page Posts: 19 (1/1/02 7:06:09 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well... King James English... what can I say? I don't know anything about it, that's what I can say ;-) I did enjoy the Story, especially the sacrafice at the end... it was a classic Good Vs. Evil fight, and I enjoy that type of stuff :-) Keep them coming!
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