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[Guest opesopacus]

I’m losing my image , I’m losing my direction

stuff stuff stuff your face you don’t know why

just go ahead and do it.

 

I’m wasting away.

I’m losing my image.

I’m losing my direction.

don’t waste this body , don’t waste this infection.

You stupid pig , how could you not have had the self – control ?

What do you want ? to return to what you were ?

 

I speak in the defense of that which is most innocent in me.there was nothing wrong with me. I’m weak. I’m a wreck. someone help me. I need a metal rod to walk on. I need a diamond support. I need someone to steady me cause I’m walking all alone… in the dark… barefoot and

 

ugly ugly ugly

[Nyyark]

I normally don't comment on depressing poetry such as this, but I suppose I shall.

 

Just as a presentation feature, could you not capitalize all of the title? Something about that bugs me, but if it has to do with your style go right ahead, because that would be different.

 

 

 

I understand this to be about a person who is overweight, and blames their control of eating on the fact. It seems this person hates themself because of the fact, which inncedentally would lead to more eating.

 

This unfortunate situation was well captured. The occasional alliteration, such as "weak" and "wreak" draw out the strong negitive meanings of the words, and the meter makes it easy to read the whole way through.

 

As a situational poem I belive it is very well done, however I completly disagree with the philophy.

 

First of all the thing that jumps out at me is the end, in which ugly and alone are used to describe the same thing. I find that difficult to make agree, because when someone is alone they are the judge of everything, in which case why make themselves ugly?

 

Now the "someone" that will steady, what will that persons opinion be? I don't understand this perpetual someone, unless it refers to a higher being. Unless this does refer to a higher being, then I don't think it will help. The problem seems to be within and not without. The problem is not, as I see it, being ugly, but seeing yourself as ugly.