reverie Posted August 12, 2002 Report Posted August 12, 2002 Revised August 12, 2002 Oh Tell Me Oh tell me -one two three… That can’t be -one two three. It’s not me -gone. I watch you falling over -gone I see you eye’s forever -one two three… That can’t be -one two three. It’s not me -gone. I see rain, falling over -you I wonder who belongs, -it’s true Oh tell me -one two three. That can’t be -one two three It’s not me -gone. I see your soft sweet shoulders -bending down I wonder who and what -you found That can’t be -one two three. I can’t be - what you see… It’s not me -gone Let talk of other problems Make light, forget fovever -gone Oh tell me -one, two, three I can’t see -you for me It’s not me -gone Let’s start the whole thing over... -now Re-write forget do-over -how? Oh tell me -one two three… That can’t be -one two three. It’s not me -gone revery the dreamlost "pretty flower..." the dream continues... Which Colossal Death Robot Are You?
Rahsash Geldich Posted August 13, 2002 Report Posted August 13, 2002 Beautiful, a peaceful piece of sorrow
Guest opesopacus Posted August 14, 2002 Report Posted August 14, 2002 I like it... i have a lot of difficulty commenting on most poetry... i think its totally subjective and don't feel the need...but ive been on here long enough that i feel obliged to put in my two cents... i like it. the sensation i got from reading the poem is one of quiet observation. maybe its my mood this morning but the poem's quiet. the picture of a lush, silent, green garden came to mind. the air lightly choking... nothing left to do...sit in a comfortable sadness and contemplation...
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