Nyyark Posted June 18, 2002 Report Posted June 18, 2002 Late one night, far past their bedtime, Two kids looking for kicks picked up ammunition. The old dilapidated temple was their vision, To hunt Zombies was their mission. Little did they know, on that late night, Odd laser experiments were preformed on the frights. Grafted on forearms now decaying, Laser guns with Chromium plating. The front door to shotgun fell Mad-tired kids let out a yell Blowing away everything in sight Where hid the Zombies on this night? Then in the main room all alone. Ventured the small kid, stiff as a bone. The other watched around the bend The trap was set, gun in hand, Then the unthinkable took place, A blue beam hit the little ones face. Paralyzed by fascination and shock The trap failed, the trapper stopped. The Zombies proceeded to run in a circle, The lasers crossing at a beautiful angle. A bizarre dance it appeared, Some flaw of Zombie AI, it was weird. "Hey" cried the friend in hiding "Its the Dance of the Lazer Zombie" heard the one who was dieing He died in throes of mad sleepless laughter. Then the Zombies turned to the new target they were after. The boy didn't even put a fight He just hoped they'd dance all night. Light dissection, he joined the grave, By odd humor, dancing Lazer Zombie made. Edited by: Nyyark at: 6/17/02 8:21:12 pm
Guest Fire Walker Posted June 18, 2002 Report Posted June 18, 2002 clap... clap... clap... Very good, Nyyark. Edited by: Fire Walker at: 6/18/02 11:40:02 am
The Portrait of Zool Posted June 18, 2002 Report Posted June 18, 2002 That is great! True storytelling in the spirit of the Iliad or other poetic stories. I've tried to do this and I know how difficult it is to pull off. That is quite a talent you have there. ~Zool~ Ancient, The Pen is Mightier than the Sword. Bard of Terra, Patron Saint of Aspiring Bards. Elder than dirt, more foolish than a jester, able to trip over the smallest logic in a single step. It's... Oh, you know.
Falcon2001 Posted June 18, 2002 Report Posted June 18, 2002 Three words, man. Creepy As Hell Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
The Big Pointy One Posted June 19, 2002 Report Posted June 19, 2002 Quite good ^.^ ...and Zool, try it in Haiku, there's another challenge in itself BigPointyStick ----------------- Wielder of the BPS Companion of Mr.Bunny "I can throw knives!"
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted June 20, 2002 Report Posted June 20, 2002 Bravo! Love it. Incredible imagary springs to mind. I do enjoy a story in a poem. Interesting tale, I must say. -Lord Seth Exodus
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