Guest Wonko the Sane Posted June 13, 2002 Report Posted June 13, 2002 I am new, obviously, now with that out of the way, I bring you some of my pretty good but not best work. need to save it for later --- I whisper your name while I sleep I feel your pain when I weep Reach out invane Grasp the emptiness before you Draw it close to your heart Close your eyes Visualize my suffering soul Hold it close Feel the chaos of my soul Feel it burning your heart Hold it closer still Feel the pain turn to warmth Breath in Feel my heart longing for you Does the curiosity spark your fire? Breath out Does the passion ignite? Smile Feel the peace fill your soul I could be yours Just don't be afraid to open your eyes Or I'll be gone Robert Hillyerd 3-11-2002 23:26:42 PDT
Guest Fire Walker Posted June 13, 2002 Report Posted June 13, 2002 It is well writen, in my opinion. Conveys raw emotion.
Falcon2001 Posted June 13, 2002 Report Posted June 13, 2002 Very interesting, indeed. I like this, and hope you stay. By the way, good luck on building that sanitarium for the rest of humanity. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
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