Falcon2001 Posted May 6, 2002 Report Posted May 6, 2002 I looked into the mirror one time And what did I see? A statue, a rock, a man of stone So my friends can rest A man to bring safety to pain A shield against life's painful edge More Sun than man, that's what I saw. I looked into the mirror two times And what did I see? A wretched soul, twisted and torn A sinner and a liar that nobody loves A man without virtues or good in him Unholy and tainted with babies' blood More Devil than man, that's what I saw. I looked into the mirror three times And what did I see? A shining knight with sword at hand A sword called Truth, no less A sword to fight the darkness off And usher in the shining light More Legend than man, that's what I saw. I looked into the mirror four times And what did I see? A writer at heart, a gentle soul A molder of words to display images A master of the written word and the sung With pen and guitar, his destiny free More Muse than man, that's what I saw. I looked into the mirror five times And what did I see? A man of many faces, all of them true A maelstrom of emotion, spinning vividly A strange form blurring in upon itself Nothing more, nothing less, than discord More Chaos than man, that's what I saw. More Sun than man? More Devil than man? More Legend than man? More Muse than man? More Chaos than man? Sun, Devil, Legend, Muse, Chaos... Light, Darkness, Fantasy, Art, and Power, the forces that bind me together...an amalgaram of many things and nothing. Like a collage of voices in a world of the deaf, I have no place but the one I make. Destinyless and alone, my path is my own. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Gyrfalcon Posted May 6, 2002 Report Posted May 6, 2002 *Gyrfalcon APPLAUDS* I have another favorite poem. Go Falcon! *Gyrfalcon cheers*
Guest Xradion Posted May 6, 2002 Report Posted May 6, 2002 I like it. Reminds me a lot of one of my own poems that I wrote about 2 months ago entitled "the man in the mirror." It seems that you and I think similarly on a lot of things. Anyway, excellent use of imagery. By the way, are you a fan of Lewis Carroll? Just curious. Xradion, The Horny Druid, Scholar of the Ancient Arts, Holder of the Eye of Odin. "The only emperor is the emperor of ice-cream." -Wallace Stevens "When at home, do as the Homans do." –Xradion
Falcon2001 Posted May 7, 2002 Author Report Posted May 7, 2002 Well, I'm not really a fan of ol' Lewis, but I must say I did appreciate Alice in Wonderland...Didn't read the sequel, whatever it was, but oh well. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Justin Silverblade Posted May 7, 2002 Report Posted May 7, 2002 Oh wow. A goodie Falcon. I like. ~Bravo!~
Guest Xradion Posted May 7, 2002 Report Posted May 7, 2002 "Didn't read the sequel, whatever it was." You're kidding, right? I mean, neither did I, but the sequel is entitled "Through the Looking Glass." I just assumed you were making an intentional allusion, but oh well. "The Jabberwocky" and "The Walrus and the Carpenter" are probably the greatest things that came out of that book anyhow...though those poems are good stuff. Xradion, The Horny Druid, Scholar of the Ancient Arts, Holder of the Eye of Odin. "The only emperor is the emperor of ice-cream." -Wallace Stevens "When at home, do as the Homans do." –Xradion
The Big Pointy One Posted May 8, 2002 Report Posted May 8, 2002 *Stick applauds* Good, of course, it'd have to be, coming from you, friend Heh, seriously tho, I like it, and can't help a similarity to myself... Anyways, keep it up ^.^
Wyvern Posted May 8, 2002 Report Posted May 8, 2002 A good poem, Falcon. Throughout the various stanzas, the narrator seems to be examining different aspects of his soul and personality. It starts off with a sombre and morose tone as he depicts the negative aspects he see's in himself and then the tone gradually becomes more upbeat as he looks at the positive sides. Images such as "A wretched soul, twisted and torn" from the first stanza contrast highly with ones such as "A writer at heart, a gentle soul" from the later ones. This use of antithesis may actually be pointing to the theme of the poem: the duality of the narrator, and where this duality may lead him in the future. "Sun, Devil, Legend, Muse, Chaos...", "Destinyless and alone, my path is my own." Just my 50 cents. [image]http://members.shaw.ca/kea/am/wyvy.jpg[/image] ------------------------------ Almost a Dragon... "My life is one big crime, I try to scheme through it." -Common, "The 6th Sense" Owner of the Decanter of Endless Booze. Edited by: Wyvern00 at: 5/7/02 10:46:12 pm
Guest Jess Posted May 8, 2002 Report Posted May 8, 2002 While it's not my favorite style, I do like what your trying to say. It's also, of course, very well written. -Jess
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