Guest andrea hawk Posted May 5, 2002 Report Posted May 5, 2002 Such a choice, My life or yours? If you live, I die. If you die I forever have guilt It's all in my hands, It is my choice, almost It lies in his hands too. But his mind is made You must go. My mind is made. You must go. I am so sorry Murder at 16. It's not fair to you As you can surely see I am so sorry You didn't stand a chance All I pray Is I get a second chance To see you in another life Or perhaps this one I am so sorry But it's what I have to do But please always remember That I love you. Edited by: andrea hawk at: 5/4/02 9:51:46 pm
Nyyark Posted May 5, 2002 Report Posted May 5, 2002 If I understood you, then I'm very sorry. Well written piece of work. Though It doesn't use any superfluous imagery or metaphors, it comes across not needing them. I thought the emotional state of the situation was conveyed very well.
Falcon2001 Posted May 6, 2002 Report Posted May 6, 2002 You know my stance on this Andrea, and I pray for luck and life for you in this venture...and I'm happy you posted a poem. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Guest Jess Posted May 8, 2002 Report Posted May 8, 2002 She looks to a woman she knows she must hurt. She looks to a man she knows she must teach. She must learn something they could never understand. So small and so powerful, She must continue her journey. She knew this vist would be short, She the pain she'd cause. She remembers that she must learn her lesson, And so must the two she effected. She goes in peace. Andrea, please don't feel guilty over this. We are all here for you and it's going to be fine.
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