Rahsash Geldich Posted April 8, 2002 Report Posted April 8, 2002 My heart has reconciled its loss And now I love you as a brother. I've even managed to forgive myself And have moved on to like another. And as a sister cares, I will guide With an unfavoring hand as light. And so long as we're both living Everything is going to be alright. What is happening? An accident? But you can't be injured, you simply can't! You aren't at home, though I've tried to call And now I'm working up to a rant! For while I'm angry, I cannot feel, I cannot feel the icy grip of fear. And I'll weep my tears of frustration Where no one is able to hear. I may love you now as a brother, But my love is still so strong. And it now tells me to be at ease Although the wait for info is long. You simply have to be okay! There is a tension in my heart, Its knows you will be alright. My imagination is what tears apart.
Ozymandias Posted April 9, 2002 Report Posted April 9, 2002 Ozymandias heats up the coffee he's drinking from and offers Rasash some. It's tough, being ignored, rejected and uninformed, *especially* in rapid succession. I know. All the same, well done poem. You still show a strong control, without being heartless.
Guest Vulturegirl Posted April 9, 2002 Report Posted April 9, 2002 Line 12 is weak, and the beginning is stronger than the end. Quite interesting
Rahsash Geldich Posted April 10, 2002 Author Report Posted April 10, 2002 That's my problem I suppose, I run out of anger by the end and now I'm just left to wonder, which is worse...
Guest Adelaide Erindale Posted April 11, 2002 Report Posted April 11, 2002 Heartache or the anger? I'm just wondering if that's what you're wondering "Which is worse..." Once again, I can relate... from more ways than one. Edited by: Adelaide Erindale at: 4/11/02 1:16:03 pm
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