Cyril Darkcloud Posted April 1, 2002 Report Posted April 1, 2002 Nothing Came Between Us I see my image in your eyes. I look so far away. I feel the need to cup my hands in a cone around my mouth, breathe deeply in, collect my voice and shout. But I seem so far away the words will just get lost, lose their breath and fall away somewhere in between. No sound to hear. No echo to return. We sit so close, not far apart at all. I could stretch my fingers out across the empty space and rest them on your arm. But I see my image in your eyes and I look so far away.
Gyrfalcon Posted April 1, 2002 Report Posted April 1, 2002 *Gyr applauds* I love the rhythm of this... good job!
Justin Silverblade Posted April 1, 2002 Report Posted April 1, 2002 Silverblade listen's intently, and a slight "Aw..." escapes his lips. ~I like it Cyril!~
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted April 3, 2002 Report Posted April 3, 2002 Bravo! Very good indeed. I tend to judge a poem by the imagery that is formed in my mind, and the emotion that is stirred. Both done wonderfully, the sight, the feeling; so strong. I enjoyed it very much. -Seth Exodus Initiate of The Pen
Gwaihir Posted April 4, 2002 Report Posted April 4, 2002 It's musical, and it's a very nice image. ---------- I want to be page 93 of Pineapples, the Avian Crows-Nyyark
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