reverie Posted March 17, 2002 Report Posted March 17, 2002 Hiya, in a bind, short on time. gotta write fast - to make it last. Two lovers sit longing, looking out on the sea. One lover's a boy, only barely a 16. But he dreams of his fortune and what he could be. And the other just weeps 'cause she's sure she can't see -- herself in his eyes when he looks at the sea... A tear from green orbs... runs down her soft cheek And she knows he will leave her for what he could be. A boy could be lover, and adventurer be. But only wants truly to quest on the sea. okay gotta go... later revery the dreamlost "strike a beat, add repeat, do over again...) the dream continues... Edited by: reverie at: 3/18/02 4:19:08 am
Falcon2001 Posted March 18, 2002 Report Posted March 18, 2002 Really good one for being so danged short, really really good! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted March 18, 2002 Report Posted March 18, 2002 Bravo! The imagery is so vivid in this, even with so little said. I like this a lot. The idea is timeless and unique. Good job. -Seth Exodus Initiate of The Pen
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