Gyrfalcon Posted February 3, 2002 Report Posted February 3, 2002 Conversion Confusion - this is post three *Gyr applauds* Simple, rhyming, and interesting. Cool!
Gwaihir Posted February 3, 2002 Report Posted February 3, 2002 Conversion Confusion - this is post Two neat! I love when someone takes a normal idea, and makes a mystery and a thing of beauty out of it. I think this is one of my favorites of yours. It gets better as it goes on I think, the imagery gets clearer. I think, that's because I don't know what you're referring to at the beginning, then when I'm able to place the imagery, it seems more vivid. (also thanks for the sig quote : ) I want to be page 93 of Pineapples, the Avian Crows-Nyyark
Nyyark Posted February 4, 2002 Report Posted February 4, 2002 Conversion Confusion - THIS IS THE ORIGINAL THREAD STARTING POST. Grey Butterfly Riding dark against the sky, Always listening, For your song long missing. Seeking, Your eyes are roaming, Never speaking, But your heart is moaning. Grey butterfly, Who will not sigh, Whose empty pools called eyes, Are long since dry. What you are seeking, Is behind you now, In a meadow Long since plowed. On moonlight you ride, Running from pain only darkness will hide. Through the shadowy forests you soar Looking for that which is no more. Live Grey Butterfly, Live! Seek not which no longer is, You have life now, Cherish it, be Glad, Do not waste it, Like the life that you had. Grey Butterfly, What you seek is behind, Lost in a cocoon, Forged on a vine. Grey Butterfly, This life is your last, Don’t lose it, Searching for the Past. Live Grey Butterfly, Live. Grey Butterfly, Please do not die. ~Nyyark, Page of the Pen, Keeper of Crows
Bhurin Posted February 4, 2002 Report Posted February 4, 2002 How quaint! The structure of the poem dances! It danced as I saw the butterfly dancing (at least to me). Most pleasing. The structure and diction of the poem come together well in this piece. I don't know if this was intentional, but I loved it. A beautiful work. Signed-
Falcon2001 Posted February 5, 2002 Report Posted February 5, 2002 It's early, but unfortunately this is the only time I have to view poems...but man, I almost missed out! Great poem, Nyvark (That IS your name, right? Like I said, it's early) keep up the great works. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2002 Report Posted February 5, 2002 Nice to see an affirmation of life in the Grey. Remember - let others judge your works, don't do it yourself. -Peredhil
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