Falcon2001 Posted February 3, 2002 Report Posted February 3, 2002 A question, a query from one who lived without the love and the life that you bathe in daily What does it feel like To look all around and see life liberty and the laughing masses I've never seen them my eyes are wide open like storms out at sea on a howling cold day My eyes they will see you my eyes they will see truth but first I must turn and then throw it away Lightning sparks And lies they crumble Under the gaze of the truthseeker's glare Transfixed like a beetle you twist underneath the piercing gaze while I look upon with Eyes of thunder You lie and you cheat them The girls that you pretend to love just so that you can throw them away Well life has it's sorrows and you have met the man who keeps all those sorrows and gives them away I see through your ego Your image, your mojo And stripped you down to exactly where you lay Naked before me your mind is wide open so scream all you want for you won't make a sound Thunder calls And your lies will crumble When you meet my gaze and succumb to my will Lies Will not stand forever Your little games are going to be ruined by the man with Eyes of thunder (Bridge) So what is your problem? And why won't she leave you? Does she enjoy all the pain that you bring? How do you keep up with all of your choices I can't understand how you keep living this way (Whispered) But I've seen way too much and she's crying in the dark and your lies are falling down now and you turn and run away (much louder) But I will keep chasing you For ever and ever until you will be paid for the fruit that you sowed Seeds of lies, chaos discord and treachery finally you will be brought to the light (Screaming) AND I CAN'T STAND TO SEE HER CRYING WHILE YOU SMILE AND GO YOUR WAY YOU'RE USING HER AND I CAN'T STOP MYSELF FROM FEELING THIS WAY So gaze into the storm And see the col eye lightning and thunder and truth and honor and feel the terror that comes your way you can't escape truth for truth is eternal And your lies netted you justice this day The storm rolls in And lies flee before it swept away by the cloudy gaze Lightning strikes closer and closer better watch out for it's coming your way Eyes of Thunder Cioden Darkeye Page of The Mighty Pen President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Rahsash Geldich Posted February 3, 2002 Report Posted February 3, 2002 ::gives a big round of applause and throws a couple roses:: Bravo!
Falcon2001 Posted February 3, 2002 Author Report Posted February 3, 2002 Good gravy, I forgot to update my sig! Well, here it is... Also, thank you all for your comments. This, in my opinion, is one of my better ones, as I can actually put it to music, most of my stuff just goes along to some unknown beat from inside my head that I can't put to music...oh well, I'm getting better! Thanks again, to everyone! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Bhurin Posted February 4, 2002 Report Posted February 4, 2002 A most excellant piece my friend. Sometimes there's nothing like a little angst to inspire emotions. Just a quick question: What style of music would you set this to? Normally I try to fill in the blanks, but nothing I could think of fit properly. Again, a most excellant piece. If I had but an ounce of talent to critique this style of poetry I would, but for now I can only enjoy. Signed-
Falcon2001 Posted February 4, 2002 Author Report Posted February 4, 2002 *Falcon bows* Thank you very much Bhurin! I hold you in very high regard and your praise means a lot to me. For music-wise, I was thinking somewhere along the lines of newer rock music, like Staind. For a feel of what the song kinda goes like, listen to For You by Staind, they fit together well. Someday I hope to record the guitar part and me singing and make an mp3 that I could share. Also, I was just about to tell you that your sig pic was outdated due to upgrades...but once again, you're ahead of me! Thanks again, all! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
Nyyark Posted February 4, 2002 Report Posted February 4, 2002 Cool!!! Those kind of people really bother me too, so I could relate well. Very uplifting. It was really well written, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done Falcon2001, really well done.
Gyrfalcon Posted February 4, 2002 Report Posted February 4, 2002 *Gyr applauds* Ooo... Good song. *grin*
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2002 Report Posted February 5, 2002 One of your better songs, Falcon. Watching someone locking into a co-dependent cycle can be terribly frustrating. Most focus on the abuser, but forget not the implied consent of the abusee. The more they learn to love and believe in themself, the sooner they're freed from their chains. I'd download an mp3 of this... -Peredhil
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