Rahsash Geldich Posted January 27, 2002 Report Posted January 27, 2002 For you I know my heart does seek, Your words still make my body weak. When you're around, I can't seem to think Brown eyes search my soul; watch me sink. Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork. I am falling into a gaping abyss- Your outstretched hand I somehow missed. But people caught me, falling from you. You took all the color, but greys are pretty too. Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork. I will learn to be happy without your touch But do not think I won't miss you a bunch. I cannot sit around waiting for you, Even though I know you love me too.
Gwaihir Posted January 28, 2002 Report Posted January 28, 2002 I like it! Someone else who likes to write in iambs "You took all the color, but greys are pretty too." I really like that line!
Rahsash Geldich Posted January 28, 2002 Author Report Posted January 28, 2002 :blushes:: ty, I liked that one as well
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2002 Report Posted February 5, 2002 Y'all cited my favorite line - but then, grey is my favorite 'color' (I've been told grey isn't a color, but rather a shade or hue or some such nonsense (don't you just love parens? (I do,))) and has been for a while. You have a nice sense of 'flow' in your works, and a curiously haunting touch. Some of your lines rise up when I'm done, at odd moments and I have to pause to remember where I read them. I like the way your poetry affirms your worth. A pleasant thing to read in one whose poems are so worthy. -Peredhil
Rahsash Geldich Posted February 6, 2002 Author Report Posted February 6, 2002 :: Blushes again:: Glad you think so, poetry is a good outlet for me
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted February 7, 2002 Report Posted February 7, 2002 Indeed a fine piece of work, Rahsash. I really like the way you keep coming back to: "Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork." (The proper poetic term for this escapes me) It paints a vivid picture of the trials, and tribulations of life, and more specifically, love. Bravo! Very nice, indeed. I hope you post more soon. -Seth Exodus Initiate of The Pen
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