Gwaihir Posted January 15, 2002 Report Posted January 15, 2002 I posted a really awful first draft of this a few months ago, but I finally decided to revamp it recently. Last year you were all that counted, I used to pray for you daily. It cut my heart to see you there, Blank face, dead eyes, a vegetable. I remember the days when you Were everything that could ever matter We loved each day as if the next Wouldn’t come, and then one day it didn’t. A great party, a great drive home, Till the river drove into me. Next day they said they there was no hope. Probably you’d never think again. For all those years I spoon fed you, Wiping your face after you ate, Hoping there could be a morning When you would wake and know your name. You’d start to speak, I’d hold my breath But then you’d say Gaga, I’d cry. And then, last month you said “Hello”, Asked me if the car was ruined. You found that you’d lost half your life, That my drinking had taken it. I think you could have pardoned that, But not Rosie, not your baby. I didn’t mean to drown her dear, It was so many years ago. I spent so many years nursing, Hoping for your return to me. And now, I wish I never had!
Gyrfalcon Posted January 16, 2002 Report Posted January 16, 2002 *Gyr applauds once more* I still love this one.
Guest Foe Calibur Posted January 17, 2002 Report Posted January 17, 2002 Bows his head Gyrfalcon is right, it is wonderfully written, and very meaningful.
Bhurin Posted January 18, 2002 Report Posted January 18, 2002 ... Bhurin is visually shaken by the poem... Very personal, Gwaihir. Thank you for sharing it...
Peredhil Posted February 6, 2002 Report Posted February 6, 2002 (Of course) This is well written, and your talent is consistently highly displayed... But I think the biggest twist ending you could deliver to me would not to have a twist ending! You have such an excellent faculty for seeing on both sides of the coin simultaneously... -Peredhil
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