Falcon2001 Posted November 25, 2001 Report Posted November 25, 2001 I'm not sure if I ever did a poem called I Am before, I'm pretty prodigious... I am a poet and I am a fool I am the darkness deep in the pool I am the presence and I am the lack I am the white and I am the black I am the evil and I am the pure I am the sickness and I am the pure I see the truth instead of the lie I see the lord instead of the fly I see the dead instead of the live I see the sadness instead of the jive I see the useful instead of the lack I see myself, a white stain on black Cioden Darkeye Page of The Mighty Pen Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta Edited by: Falcon2001 at: 11/25/01 3:00:15 am
Gyrfalcon Posted November 26, 2001 Report Posted November 26, 2001 *Gyrfalcon applauds* The only change I can suggest is this line: I am the sickness and I am the pure you used pure in the previous line, thus: I am the sickness and I am the cure *Gyr applauds*
Falcon2001 Posted November 28, 2001 Author Report Posted November 28, 2001 Yeah, I saw that after I had finished...shortly thereafter, my computer crashed. Sorry. Cioden Darkeye Page of The Mighty Pen Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta
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