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the mirror (yes, i am still alive)


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Guest Dragcor Warwick
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Temptation-

Why won't you leave me alone?

Lurking Every Corner, everywhere I go

 

Self Control-

Don't turn your back on me now

When I need you the most

 

Constant pressure tests my will

My will or my won't

My Self Control escapes from me still...

 

Hypocrite-

How could you be so cruel

and expect my faith in return?

 

Resistance-

Is not as hard as it seems

When you close the door

 

I spent so long trusting in you

I trust you forgot

Just when I thought I believed in you...

 

It's time for me to deal

Becoming all too real

living in fear-

 

Why did you lie and pretend?

This has come to an end

I'll never trust you again

 

It's time you made your amends

Look in the mirror my friend

"That I haven't behaved as I should"

 

"Everything you need is around you.

The only danger is inside you."

"I thought you could control life,but it's not like that.

There are things you can't control."

 

Let's stare the problem right in the eye

It's plagued me from coast to coast

Racing the clock to please everyone

All but the one who matters the most

 

Reflections of reality

are slowly coming into view

How in the hell could you possibly forgive me?

 

After all the hell I put you through

 

It's time for me to deal

Becoming all too real

living in fear-

 

Why'd I betray my friend?

Lying until the end

Living life so pretend

 

It's time to make my amends

I'll never hurt you again

  • 2 weeks later...
Guest Dragcor Warwick
Posted

well, i see that i should apologize, for ever thinking i could have fun without such people, yadda yadda yadda (smacks kin, STOP IT) anywho, i think im done now, yes...erm....yeah, ok

  • 2 weeks later...
Guest CloudBurn
Posted

High claps for thee!

 

The energy is there, work at channeling it (that's the hard part ) THE REGULATOR

 

 

 

All your base are belong to us.

  • 1 month later...
Posted

Bhurin stands silent for some time, his eyes full and round, seeming to blind over as he thinks over the words...

 

Dragcor Warwick... A truly amazing and interesting piece.

 

Beg your pardon if my responce is somewhat un-articualte, but you surpised me just now.

 

That sudden jump from free/blank verse to intense and repetitive rhyming caught me completely off guard. I felt a surge of emotion... Like a climax building in a song...

 

And, if I may make an observation, I made special notice of how you capitialized the names of the qualities you were describing, as if they were living things and you were, in fact, addressing by name. Was this intentional?

 

Beg your pardon, but sometimes grammar forces me to notice things like that.

 

But please forgive me for rambling. Bhurin shakes his head, as though knocking dust from it My thoughts aren't clear right now and obviously my words must suffer for it.

 

An excellant piece.

 

Signed-

Edited by: Bhurin at: 2/14/02 10:13:05 pm

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