Yui-chan Posted October 26, 2001 Report Posted October 26, 2001 Feel. Love and Care. Live. Learn and Act. Laugh. In the Old Way. Hurt. Fight and Hate. Die. Teach and Rest. Cry. In the Old Way. Hope. Trust and Give. Breathe. Share and Take. Sing. In the Old Way, The only way. Find your way, the right way. Never their way, the locked way, the stifling way. Only one way is the true way. The Old Way was your way. Live that way. A bit of very random poetry-looking stuff from yours truly. Please don't lynch me.
Peredhil Posted December 17, 2001 Report Posted December 17, 2001 Peredhil browses through, trying to catch up on his reading - and stumbles on this poem. *Very very nicely done- The stacatto phrases add emphasis to the pared down expresson of the basics of life, love, the raw emotional foundations of human existence. The cry for freedom to choose your own way, away from the traditions that have become bondage without thought or examination is most effective after the atomic build-up. -A pleasure to read.* At the risk of being pendantic and totally missing the point, Peredhil replaces his mental Yadda-Yadda-Yadda with the actual thought that usually lie between the asterisked lines...
Falcon2001 Posted December 17, 2001 Report Posted December 17, 2001 A good poem, I am a fan of freeform, and this is a very good example. I like the style and the sentence quality, keep it up!
Guest CloudBurn Posted December 21, 2001 Report Posted December 21, 2001 *many clappings* THE REGULATOR All your base are belong to us.
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