Run

[Falcon2001]

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My feet pound the ground

Like the running of elk

As I stream down the gravel driveway

Filled with memories I suddenly

Don't want anymore

The driving rain blinds me, but

I run on heedless, always putting one foot

Ahead

of

the

other

Left

Right

Left

Right

Until the pattern is I

And I am the pattern

And my legs pump, each vein flowing with pure acid

And with each step I die

But I can never

Ever

Ever

Get far enough away from the house

I am running from

And the girl inside

Who's secrets I can't untie

And who's demenor and beauty

*only to I, only to I*

Attract my obsession, which I

Stuff

away

into the dark corner of my mind

where it's nice and quiet and she

isn't haunting me

And with each step

I feel her soft skin beneath my strong hands

as I rub the knots of her back away,

leaving her tired and relaxed

*When someone rubs my back, it tenses to the breaking point*

and leaves me empty and sore

but happy, to help her

instead of I

And I run and run and run and run

but I can't get away

and my shirt is soaked with rain

tears from heaven

tears from a god who doesn't care

but decides to let it rain

or maybe he was urinating on me

to show me

how much of a fool I am

but maybe not

and now I stop

collapse

fall

to the ground

and I wonder why I ran

like the hamster in the wheel

that can't get anywhere

and I cry alone

on the gravel streetside

pouring out my tears into the falling rains

and in that moment

a part of me died

and I wiped the tears away

and I went back to my house, walking

serenely

sure of my sanity once more

and I looked upon the house

but felt nothing

for that died

on the street

 

PLEASE tell me what you think of it...

CiodenDarkeye

Initiate of The Pen

Hopeful Patron Saint of Impatience

[Gyrfalcon]

*Gyrfalcon applauds the excellent poem* (or should this sort of thing go to the feedback forum now?)

[Sweetcherrie]

Ok, I know that this is really old, and probably already forgotten, but to me it's new, and after reading it I just had to say how much I liked this.

 

The repetition and structure in this gives me a hunted feeling, and I just loved reading this.

 

- Sweetcherrie