Guest Blondemoon Posted January 4, 2003 Report Posted January 4, 2003 (I wrote this one last night, after talking to a friend of mine. it was written with him in mind, obviously. it took me forever to get the last three lines, and even now I'm not entirely happy with them. but if I don't post it, I get the feeling I'll rip it to shreds hehe...also the first time in ages I've gotten stuff to rhyme without too much frustration.) I hear your pain in every word you speak I feel your pain and it makes me want to weep you speak to me of your misery and of how different you wish you could be you beat on yourself like there's nothing better to do and then lash out when I tell you it's not true and then we argue some more and what can I do? I try to help you to the best of my ability but what good does it do when you lose all sensibility you repeat to me time and time again that you are worthless nothing but a worthless man I always say the same, and I'll say it again now you are not what you say you are if you were, I would not be proud to call you my friend.
Peredhil Posted January 4, 2003 Report Posted January 4, 2003 I know a NUMBER of people who should read this! Really good encapsulation of concept and translation of heart. hugs Keep 'em coming! We do not write because we want to; we write because we have to. W. Somerset Maugham
Guest Blondemoon Posted January 4, 2003 Report Posted January 4, 2003 thank you peredhil *blushes bright red, slaps on some goofy teeth, and shuffles her feet* although that last part still bothers me...*holds her hand back from touching it even in notepad*
Falcon2001 Posted January 4, 2003 Report Posted January 4, 2003 Heh, wonderful poem, Blondemoon - and the last part is good also - even though it's blindingly true. Keep up the good work, and in case you didn't know, Peredhil is quite possibly one of the kindest, most nurturing people here and praise from him is well worth it's weight in zig.
Guest Carlyan the Wise Posted January 4, 2003 Report Posted January 4, 2003 Well written! Again, I can feel that you are trying to help your friend through this poem-- and it rings true with many, especially the part about them saying they're worthless, etc., and as Peredhil said, many people should read this and take it to heart. Way to set an example. *pushes him/her towards recruiter's office, whistling innocently*
Guest Rune Posted January 9, 2003 Report Posted January 9, 2003 Amazing. Reminds me of a conversation I had with someone just this morning. Kind of funny how it strikes the heart in that certain way that makes you feel like you can truely connect with a poem. Great job hun! *reassuring nuzzles* *chants for more* *waves some flags*
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