Pain

[Guest Blondemoon]

(this poem was written when I was having a particularly bad couple of days added to some other things. not a good time, but I'm hoping that the new year will bring much better things with it, like spring )

 

never good enough

always on the outside

looking in.

never wanted

never loved

filled with lies

eagerly listening

believing.

desperate to believe

that she could be

somebody to someone.

loved.

always alone

but not by choice

but because she's

(unwanted).

desperate for death

desperate for a release

from never-ending pain.

tormented by things

so close,

within her grasp...

and then denied.

[Guest Rune]

So much pain... is good to know that you have faith in the new year and I am sure that things will improve for the best.

 

Thanks for sharing your poem. Once again I can identify with alot of what you are saying, as I am sure anyone here who has ever been down on their luck or out of love can as well. Cant wait to see more!

 

*does the post more dance*

[Guest Blondemoon]

thank you for your praise Rune. I'm glad someone likes what I've written more than I do. I'm certainly going to have to start making with the praise, cause I've seen so much here that I like, and is just mind-blowing. It's a wonder I worked up the guts to post any of my own. (I have a Pen member to thank for that)

 

I certainly plan to post more, as soon as I can quit writing three lines and then getting stuck.

[Annael]

*lifts a drink in praise*

 

well done Moon. Lots of emotions, makes you feel it deep within your bones. I think you'd be a welcome addition to the Pen family.

[Guest Brute3]

It is a good piece you've written. I think that you would fit in well around here. Don't feel discouraged that you sometimes get stuck. I've got a list of stories that are partially done because I got stuck one some part of them. However, I keep trying. Practice, practice, practice. To me, that's a large part of what the Pen is all about. A place you can hone your skills at writing and receive constructive criticism to aid you.

 

Should you feel intimidated by some of the works in here, know that you're not alone. We all have felt that way before and still do at times. These folks in here that have neat titles such as Ancient, Elder, Bard, and so forth wrote frequently in a place called the Archmage Bulletin Boards. I read the posts they made there and I always wanted to post along with them, but felt I would be overshadowed by them. When I was asked to join the Pen myself, I was very hesitant for that reason. It occurred to me that the Pen isn't about who can write the best, or who has the best grammar or vocabulary, but rather it's about each individual member doing what they can and attempting to better themselves at it. You'll find that not one person here in the Pen will think badly of you or what you write so long as you give yourself a voice. We are a community of writers, poets, artists, and friends. I believe Peredhil,among others,has emphasized this over and over to every new member.

 

So go over to the Recruiter's office, submit your entry and have a seat. Wyvern will be around to look at your entry eventually.

 

 

Brute

O Drunken One

[Guest Carlyan the Wise]

Haha, I'm now Carlyan the Critique Cleric!

 

This poem was pretty deep-- far beyond my understanding, doubtlessly, but I liked it, definately. The fact that you used single words as lines at times was pretty cool and showed emphasis, and I liked that... *might have to try it one of these days*

 

Keep it up!

 

Oh, and I think you're wanted at the Recruiter's office. Don't mind the Geld schemes lying around, and definately don't try them, but head on over and apply!

[Peredhil]

although I can't (mercifully?) relate to the subject matter, I can recognize the power of how it's done.

 

You've a lot of raw talent. I hope the new year gives you joys to express, once you've made room for them.