Guest Mister Burrofoot Posted December 25, 2002 Report Posted December 25, 2002 =- I Cry =- I wander through the darkness, With you in my sights, I cry out in detest and pain, Echoing through the night, I no longer have anything to gain, It's now raining in my head, I cry out in anger and resentment, Trying to wake up; but I am already DEAD...
SoaringIcarus Posted December 29, 2002 Report Posted December 29, 2002 Nice rhyme scheme. The 'with you in my sights' versus 'wandering in darkness' really adds to the meaning of the 'you' in this poem. I've always been fond of the face. Write on. -SoaringIcarus
Annael Posted December 29, 2002 Report Posted December 29, 2002 with every death there is rebirth. well done
Guest Carlyan the Wise Posted December 31, 2002 Report Posted December 31, 2002 Ahh, a good poem... good choices of words, deserving far more stanzas, if you ask me... But, it was good just the way it was.
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