Guest Jonathan Wolfe Posted December 4, 2002 Report Posted December 4, 2002 Sitting, waiting ambience, paitence... time bored is that it? no... waiting again. blankness running, hurry no time, too late... heartbeat can't breathe remember to breath over there... no..where? hit. me? --- "Enternity lies ahead, and behind. Have you drunk your fill?"
Guest andrea hawk Posted December 5, 2002 Report Posted December 5, 2002 Thats cool I really like it! Great fluencey, and it feels like what you really think from time to time... nice.
Guest Jonathan Wolfe Posted December 5, 2002 Report Posted December 5, 2002 Thank you for your input Andrea... anyone else care to comment? --- "Enternity lies ahead, and behind. Have you drunk your fill?"
Vlad Posted December 5, 2002 Report Posted December 5, 2002 Hmm... I though I did comment. O well. It conveys imagery. Very well in fact. I see a struggle, internal possible. I would like to hear Nyyark's opinion on this... ===Vlad the rage-aholic=== I can't live without rage-ahol! "Me is smart. Dur." -Stick
Guest wordphoole Posted December 7, 2002 Report Posted December 7, 2002 Feels as a dream, with something slightly frantic, yet detatched. Nice work.
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