Guest amcstarry Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 Ok, I made this for a very special person to me. I wanted to show how much I cared about him so I figured making this picture would help, but then I went and wrote a poem for it too. He is a member of this site so I wont be to suprized if he see's my post lol. and here is the poem, the place I uploaded it, MSN, resized it so you cant read the poem! Heaven on Earth. Looking into your eyes Makes me dream of a place A place far from here A place of eternal happiness and love In this place, that is known as heaven I see myself With a smile Because I've been chosen to live among the great. But for every good there is a bad This bad is far worse then you could ever imagine Hell Where the fires burn and where all evil lives The shadows that escape drag more down To live there for eternity Instead of enjoying the great life above Some can escape the cold hands of the black demons Their guardian angel rescues them For me I have escaped You are my guardian angel and you have rescued me The light that you hold brightens my life bringing the happiness that was once only held in heaven down to earth So now I can live a life of happiness and once I've shut my eyes for the last time My joy will follow me to a new land Where I can live among the angels and be with the angel of my heart If you do not save me from the fiery below then my dreams will never become alive they will be shattered the moment I die Rescue Me. *hugs Michael*
Lady Celes Crusader Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 This is a lovely poem. I can feel the joy this special person gives you through your words. Keep them coming
reverie Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 I love your structure... great job... welcome... good luck with the love thing... revery the dreamlost "spin it round again" juliana hatfield the dream continues...
Peredhil Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 Multi-talented and well done. When someone gives you a 'leg-up' on life, their greatest reward is to see you grow to stand on your own as an equal. But tributes are a feedback that is always wonderful! Hugs Welcome to the Mighty Pen site, M'dear. Hope you'll come back frequently. -Peredhil We do not write because we want to; we write because we have to. W. Somerset Maugham
Guest White Rose Oujisama Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 Aww... That's a really well done poem, and the picture is amazingly crafted...the flow of your poem and your word choice really brings it to life, and gives great insight about how you feel...I really like it... -Ouji-Sama the appreciated and greatly flattered...*blush blush*
Guest amcstarry Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 thanks I have a lotttt more poems but they are a lottt different from that one. If ya want to see them just tell me though, but none my other ones have pics with them. I could make pics for them but I'm to lazy to do that lol.
SoaringIcarus Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 I want to see many more of them, please. Welcome. -Icarus
Guest amcstarry Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 ok... I have really bad gammer, most of these havnt been edited yet, feel free too lol. .I'm all alone. In this great big world A shadow dancer I be-- A shadow follower I am. Into the night, you'll find me. In the depths of hell is where I'll be… If death is your wish, then I'm your girl. Killing is my hobby-- --but also a chore. I'm so sorry father… For I have sinned… Two seconds ago was my last confession. .Two seconds more with you. I'll be back there again… Please don't send me back! I'm not mental! I just have problems… But they're only in the head! So can't you see? I was meant to be free So leave me be --and I can be me. .All Alone. _______________________________________________________________ .Can you hear death?. I see blood-- dripping down your face… A hole in the head. A gun in the hand. But why? Was life a living hell? Did you see the fires at night? I feel your pain… I hear your cries… But did I help? No. Now I see you, --hearing your voice --screaming your insanity I hear the shot, the bullet going through your head… but also through my mind. My dreams shattered, yours destroyed. Why do I see your death even Before you start to die? Because that's how I want you. As dead as the cold soul that was held inside yourself. Now I take the gun --and see myself like you Lifeless. Dead. But do I wish suicide, or do I not? Boom goes the gun… I fall to the floor. The gun at my side the red liquid escaping me. I take my last breath-- Hearing my death… .Redrum. _______________________________________________________________ .Insanity. Is it real or a hoax? Did you try and commit suicide but not succeed? As did I, but I'm still here. What a pity. Wouldn't the world be so much better If you and I where gone? --But it's too late We have tried but cannot leave I'm sorry Mr. President for screwing the world I can't help it It's something I do But something I shouldn't. Don't lock me up It'll only get worse I'm alone in this world Or are you here by my side? I will never know if I do this A gun to the head Is it the answer? Should I try once again-- to do what I've been trying to do for so long? But if I succeed will anyone care? Will I be missed? Too late now, no turning back What's done is done. To the fires of the underworld I go But I was already there… I was yet to discover For my life was a living hell. Now I see that what I have done has not solved anything… But only made it worse. I'm sorry Mr. Councilor, but your advice did not work. Look what I have done --and now its the end My world in a swirl… my mind in a hole… my life in hell. Are you crazy? Because I'm Insane .And that's just the way I am. _______________________________________________________________ .Heart Broken. Stick a stake through my heart. Wait. There's one already there… My cracked heart bleeds, hurt from the one that I love. Why must you do this? Now my life is over, My heart disowned. No point in living now… --my heart is turned to stone. So how to kill my crying soul? Maybe a overdose… --or suffocation. It all works--but which to chose? .I know. I stick a gun in my throat, a bottle of Advil in my hand, a knife in the other. I shall swallow this Advil. I shall stab my already bleeding heart ---then I shall shoot myself. And it will all be over I'll return to my home --the world below-- And shall forever remain for the sin I have done. Suicide --a good way out. The way that sends you straight to hell. But what do I care? I was going there… Wasn't I? With my demented thoughts I would have been there. My heart is still broken… and now forever it will be. I shall suffer for eternity In the depths of hell, .without my love. Once again I'm lost… with nowhere to go… and no way to get out.. .I'm trapped. _______________________________________________________________ .Shadowed Figure. Walks alone in the shadows of the night. The crescent moon lighting his path… The darkened clouds soon roll over. His path covered, the ground begins to shake. .as he falls. ..deeper and deeper.. Into the underworld. Met by the devil himself upon his arrival, the ember flames burning him-- wishing to spend eternity in the depths of hell. To be protected by the shadow walkers, and loved by none --but hated by many. You become engulfed in flames, sweat dripping down your face… You look down and see your hands melting in the scorching heat. You become scared. --and do not wish this life. But is that your final answer? It's too early to tell. You begin to scream. Then you wake up-- and look around… Surrounded by crimson walls the smell of blood in the air… Death surrounding you. Screams heard from every direction, you are in hell now. Was before a dream? --or was it the shadowed figures messing with your mind… .Dreaming of hell?. _______________________________________________________________ .Cursed. I believe thats what I am with a family that is not one at all a mother who is a angel a father who is a demon a brother who is from hell but what am I? I can not figure it out Maybe Im just normal and ment to be nowhere or maybe I was ment to never excist to save my mothers voice and my fathers burning flames my brother who always tells me about the 'wonderful' world below and telling me I should join him but is that who I am? A wanderer of the underworld? I do not know But first I would have to die My mother killed by my father a bullet in her head I witnessed her death she feel dead on me the blood ozing all over My father Killed by the devil he was not 'evil' enough for my mother had changed him to prove his evilness he was made to kill my mom but that wasnt enough the devil made him kill my brother to so then he was in hell but he wasnt quite dead yet so the devil finished the job aint he just so kind So now theres me here all alone everyone dead My soul has died but I just wont I cant die but why? Maybe I can finish myself off with that knife over there the cold steel blade aginst my neck one move and I'd be dead bleeding to death is that my wish? Yes it is then I will not be alone I will be with the demons that live in the underworld Whoops there goes the knife Now I know I was cursed .What Fun. _______________________________________________________________ .Lair. You can not keep secrets arnt you such a great friend in hell you belong in the burning flames you will end so leave my life you are unwanted now you broke a promise and told my deepest secrets my deepest fear a friend I thought I could trust that turns in the end. Why have you done this? You know deserve death and death I shall bring you Death of the mind, body, and soul With this blade my problems shall be solved for you will be out of my life and my secrets safe once more with this blade your soul will parish with this blade your mind will die now with this blade I cut into you a star a star with a circle to protect you from doing harm to me and others Im binding you from hurting us Im binding you from your cruel intentions Now that you are through with this blade I slit your neck and now you are gone forever forgood .Good Bye. _______________________________________________________________ .Heaven. Is it real? Is god really there? but if heaven is real... wouldnt hell be also? But which would be better? Heaven or Hell Heaven for the good and those who do not hurt themselves or others hell for the bad the rulebreakers the hurters If god is so great why doesnt he stop us? To keep us going to hell? Why cant he use his magic powers to save us all from the firey depths below I know because he is non exsisence So hear me now heaven and hell Which to chose? Hell for heaven is not real it is not possiable no one is perfect so how could anyone be in? But hell you see is for those who have sinned those who have commited a crime big or small it doesnt matter for hell is where you'd end up so cant you see? no matter how hard you try hell is where you'll be and heaven ruined by the people of hell and hell will take over engulfing the world in flames so as far as we know we could be in heaven right now it is not burning so its clearly not hell but it is also not on clouds so maybe its midway Maybe its helven A place where heaven and hell do not exsist a place for all to be free for now .Enjoy it while it lasts. _______________________________________________________________ .Imprisonment. Im locked away in a four sided room the walls of cold stone holding me in one wall made of bars that hold me in Why am I here? What have I done? When did I commit a crime? Never Then why am I here? I was framed Top suspect for recent killing Dark brown eyes, brown hair, 5ft 10inch is the description I fit How do I escape? The others that want me that I do not with to be with Help me I cannot get out you must make them see That it was a set up to get me put away so they could be free I should not be here dont you believe me? Oh lord please help wait if I have sinned then hell I must pray to Please end my life let me die I do not wish to live in this four sided cube Nothing to kill myself with but fear itself I must escape If I do not make it I will die trying Out into the prison yard I go Towards the fence Bang! I feel something biting my leg I feel liquid escaping painting the fence that I longed to get over Bang! Another bite but this in the back The pain is to much I fall to the ground motionless Footsteps heard coming my way as once again I hear that horriable sound Bang! And now I was gone my last breath hearing my sucide my soul sent down to hell Oh how nice Im not trapped anymore The smell of death surrounding me as the flames shot up all around I am free atleast free to roam the underworld also known as hell .I am free Are you?. _______________________________________________________________ .Unwanted. Not wanted for a crime you commited are you alone? Are you not wanted by your family? Is your life a living hell because you have no friends? That sucks for you then doesnt it Knowing that no one wants you in this world that you have no purpose of living But you could always make a purpose be a proud loner do something no one has before Then kill yourself and you will be known world wide Doesnt that sound like fun! But your sucide must be good no guns, knifes, or pills Use a rope hang it from the ceiling then burn yourself with fire then to get rid of the pain hang yourself but first call a friend and tell him to come by then your death will be found and you will be known nationwide Aint that great? then you wont be unwanted people will morn your death and wish they tried to help but its tolate they didnt and now they feel wrong and you are now wanted in the depths of hell is where you now rest wishing you had done something else But theres no going back now you cannot change the past sorry just got to find a way to be wanted .In Hell. _______________________________________________________________ .Hating You. My hatred for you grows everyday everytime I see you I wanna hurl Im growing sick mentally and emotionally only because I know you are in this world Leave me be so I can be free of your harmful ways DIE DIE DIE Then I'll be sane once more if you where gone from the world everything for me would change get hit by a car stabbed by a gangster shot by a robber it makes no difference you'd be dead anyway and gone from my life maybe I was ment to do it maybe my purpose in life is to bring you down so now I know my purpose and what I must do I'll forever burn in the fires of hell but that doesnt matter you'll be gone and that's all that does with this blade I slit your throat with this blade I'm killing you with this blade I have brought you down .Good Bye. _______________________________________________________________ .In this world. which I hate so much I see me dead with a smile on my face If I were to die would I be happy for once? Would I like the world below? Or would it hurt me more I can not answer this question unless I dare to take the risk but once Im gone theres no turning back So do I wish a life in hell? Or do I wish to suffer just to be in heaven What a hard question deciding the fate of my soul I believe Id rather live with the devil A life in hell is what I want For Im to good for heaven And to bad for helven With the devil I shall live "Oh devil, M'love, Its so nice being queen of the underworld" is what I world say Now hell is my home And Im hear to stay no thoughts of going back no cares of the ones I left Now leave me alone .Or be sent to Helven. _______________________________________________________________ .These Tears. Of mine are from my saddened self My broken heart sewed back together Bits and peices of my shattered mind returning My tears of joy dribbling down my pale cheaks My sanity has returned? what a great day this is Or has my heart come back? but my sanity still missing Release the hounds my sanity is on the lose! We must catch it so I can leave this padded room and be out in the great big world With my love My heart's keeper For he will forever hold my heart Broken it shall never be Have the damn hounds found it yet? Without my sanity I'll have to leave once more To the firey below The crimson flames licking my body as I walk through the shadowed land A burning scensation filling my heart Knowing Id be back once more But when would I see him again? But when? Would he still be there waiting Like how Iv waited for him Or will he be disloyal and leave me because im incurable with this evil desiese Oh how i wish to return once more But I believe Imtrapped I see no open doors To leave the underworld I must stay forever now Oh Joy! My hearts shattered again The peices no where to be found For I have lost my love once more and this time .Its Forever. _______________________________________________________________ .Why. Must I feel this way When I see you at my side? Knowing you do not love me when you tell me so But can you tell me one thing truthfully why did you lie? I could have handled the truth. I can see why I'm not loved But for you to lie You have made yourself unloved. My once put together heart broken once more as I listen to your lying words replying in my mind. I love you are the words I hear even though I know they are not real I can always dream cant I? To hear those sweet words from the one that I love so much to know that I am loved back but then to find out it was never true Never ment to be But why? Because of the bitch that stands in my way to your heart that you believe you like because BAM and she hit you with her ugliness that attricted you to like her How sad I feel for you because you date the devil's main hoe. You do not pay for her but she only gives you pleasure your personal free whore you must be loving it But what I can offer is so much more A loving heart and a caring mind For I am not a free whore and I will actually care if you are to hurt yourself you are to be hurting me But to hurt me you said you shall not So dont break your promise once more And hurt yourself to escape your free hoe your present from the underworld Just break away from the firey depths and Return to the one that you love I may not be that one but I shall always dream I am My love will always remain but Im not sure how much Longer I will My broken heart eating away at my soul bringing me closer and closer to the edge the edge of death that I currently wish because You have broken your promise So please will you love me It is my only wish to be loved by the one that I love and to be hated by those I hate Star bight Star light Please grant me this wish tonight to win my loves heart to have my heart glued back together and my soul slowly healing Star bight Star light please grant me this wish tonight To see my love away from the whore that claims her love for him but will never love him like I For my love is true My love is real So let your love escape and break free from its chains to come to the wisher of it Which would be me So we can be together and we can love one another and our lives would be forever .Happily Ever After. _______________________________________________________________ .Shadows of hell. Do you see the shadows at night calling you to come forth to the underworld calling you to bring you to live with the devil the shadows of the night the messangers of hell they lurk from hell to helven and sometimes to even heaven but they always end up where they first begin do you know where that is? Its the world below that we all dread that we will end up in the end but dont be scared the shadows are our friends just follow them and they will take you from end to end of the firey world to explore and learn about your new home Your new life in the place below h.e approches you e.scape while you can l.ive as long as possiable l.ast in helven, end up in heaven for heaven is better then hell atleast thats what some believe although I believe different Following the black creatures of the night the stealers of the light bringing you below meeting your new faith but what have you done to deserve such a thing? Have you sinned your such a disgrace Your not sorry for your crime so dont try and plead innocent for we all know you are guilty theres no escaping once they have caught you there is no getting away once they have brough you down .Down to the fires below. _______________________________________________________________ .Shattered. My dreams broken My heart in peices But one place is left from crumbling One place still stands My broken heart never to be fixed My dreams never to be acieved A shattered dream is what I now have A broken heart is what it gave me This once place No better then the place below But better then the one above But wait? Heaven has been dystoryed too What a joyous world Of hell Only one place remains. In the firey depths below it brings itself up To never leave you waiting for the beauty or disgust you requested A photo of the firey underworld A dream of the clouded above But only one remains .Shattered. _______________________________________________________________ .Freed. Im away once more To live by myself again Until the one worthy comes forth and tries to claim me as his own But didnt you know its impossiable to own what isnt a item? I am impossiable to own I can be liked But I cannot like I can be loved But love can never escape me So do you dare Mess with my locked away mind Try and unscramble my thoughts and here the inside voice But that is not for you No, it is not So do not take me For I am not to be taken Do not wish for me For I am not a star And do not love me For loving me will hurt you more then no love at all. .Love isnt real, so dont pretend. _______________________________________________________________ .Hide. But you cannot I am everywhere In your dreams And in your thoughts Hidding is not an option For it only makes it worse The longer you make me wait The longer I'll make you suffer So try to save yourself And do not make me mad My bad side is a side not to be seen For you have only seen my good So do not cross that bloody line Do not make me go over the edge .If you do, I will kill you. _______________________________________________________________ .Heaven on Earth. Looking into your eyes Makes me dream of a place A place far from here A place of eternal happiness and love In this place, that is known as heaven I see myself With a smile Because I'v been chosen to live among the great. But for every good there is a bad This bad is far worse then you could ever imagine Hell Where the fires burn and where all evil lives The shadows that escape drag more down To live there for eternity Instead of enjoying the great life above Some can escape the cold hands of the black demons There gardian angel rescues them For me I have escaped You are my gardian angel and you have rescued me The light that you hold brightens my life bringing the happiness that was once only held in heaven down to earth So now I can live a life of happiness and once I'v shut my eyes for the last time My joy will follow me to a new land Where I can live among the angels and be with the angel of my heart If you do not save me from the firey below then my dreams will never become alive they will be shattered the moment I die .Rescue Me.
Degenero Angelus Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 I honestly am speechless. Until now I've never seen anyone who had any more raw free verse talent then I. Absolutely amazing. Degenero, the 'one and only' "The death of one is a tragedy, the death of millions is just a statistic." - Joseph Stalin, 1946
reverie Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 bravo... u have a lot talent little one... ever heard of a slam poet? think you have the potenial to be one... look them up... Also like how your poems seem to flow into one another... nice progession... keep it up revery the dreamlost "oh sweet bird of repose" (sky heros) the dream continues
Guest amcstarry Posted December 1, 2002 Report Posted December 1, 2002 thank you very much, I will look into that but I'm probably not old enough. I'm only 14 er, and Iv written all those poems in the past like two months or so? I just started getting into poetry because I rp horses, and I rp a very evil mare named Solitary Confinement so I wanted to write a poem for her and thats how it all started. I learned I have a very violent mind and it became fun, although my mom is completly aginst it, she doesnt even know I still write poems, after she read my first one for the horse she told me I'm not allowed to write anymore, but oh well to late now eh?
Guest Mister Burrofoot Posted December 2, 2002 Report Posted December 2, 2002 Very Nice job.. I unfortunatly cannot view the pciture , but if it is as beautifull as your words, and you are but 14, you life in poetry has just started as you dabble in it.. May you write nothing but better and better poetry each time the pen meets the paper.. -The Kender
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