reverie Posted November 24, 2002 Report Posted November 24, 2002 Across the way…24NOV2002 1815… Wondering boy across the way Sits on a bench- Looking for things -he should say… But he's not what you wanted -So look a way From the wandering boy across the way… See him off writing Frantic in style.. Searching his head For things that will smile But he’s not you wanted -so look away From the wandering boy Across the way… revery the dreamlost "strike a beat..." the dream continues... Edited by: reverie at: 11/24/02 4:03:28 pm
SoaringIcarus Posted November 27, 2002 Report Posted November 27, 2002 Familiar. I like it. Last stanza: "He's not [what] you wanted" ? -Icarus
reverie Posted November 27, 2002 Author Report Posted November 27, 2002 yep... 'what' was forgotten... think the poems pretty cliche myself. That prolly why it seem familar, but not bad for 10min effort on a bench in the cold...waiting for a call... rev...
Vlad Posted November 28, 2002 Report Posted November 28, 2002 Rev, I gotta hand it to you. You are good. *Pulls a big "I" and "T" out of his pocket* (applause)
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