To A Lovelorn Youth

[Guest foxglove4543]

Now, my friend, do not despair

Chances at your age are fair

Seek not love for its own sake

That would be a gross mistake

 

Live each moment as it comes

Welcome Life with open arms

True love finds it way to you

Sweet and fresh as morning dew

 

Love will wear down all facade

Grotesque masks you'll both discard

Soul to soul you'll both connect

But love evades; that's Life's sad fact

 

So patience now, you eager lad

For all you have, you should be glad

Perhaps, one day, you'll find true love

Henceforth, would angels sing above.

[HopperWolf]

I like this seems alot of my own friends claim love where they merely are in love with the idea of love.

 

And others disillusioned with love altogether as they haven't found it yet. It is a confusing time, but they are still young.

 

Still, no one wants to be alone, and it gets to them.

[Guest Lord Seth Exodus]

I like it; the idea is there; the idea is good. Just one thing. I should like to inquire about the rhyme scheme. It seems inconsistant to me. The first stanza flows beautifully, the second half as well, the third almost not at all, and then the last is as the first. Actually, it seems as though you knew exactly what you were doing; slowly bring it down, and then a restructured finish. Well, no matter what the case may be, if that was intentional, or this is just how you plotted the scheme without thought to such a thing, or whatever. I was just curious. Though, I do like the poem. The thought is classic, and the presentation unique and new. Bravo!

 

Yours,

Lord Seth Exodus

Initiate of The Pen

[Guest foxglove4543]

Thanks for your comments, everyone

 

I had intended to get the poem rhyming smoothly, but I guess I am not pronouncing words the "right" way and thus to the proper speaker, the words do not appear to rhyme as well. I'll see what I can do about the poem, though.

 

Thanks again