The Dark Angles

[Guest FlUtEDoRk502]

“Ooooww, this isn’t funny! You just wait till I tell Mom, then all three of you are going be in big trouble! You are so meeeeaaaan! Could you be any meaner? You just wait till I get my wings then I’ll get you. Leave me alone! This isn’t funny! You would run too if your older brothers were trying to take you to angles dive. What did I ever do to you?” Danielle Screamed as she ran for her life from her three older brother’s Brett, Morgan, and Lee. Morgan was the oldest he had blue eyes, hair, and wings. He was the strongest in their world; he took after his Dad. Brett was the second oldest. He had purple eyes, hair, and wings. He was known for his intellengencets in the art of war. He took after his Mother. Lee was the youngest out of three boys. He has purplish blue eyes, hair, and wings. He was known for being the fastest in their World. Danielle had navy blue eyes, hair, and when her wings grow in they would also be navy blue. Danielle’s best friend was Amanda. She had black eyes, hair and when they grow in Black wings. Amanda’s best friend was Sara. She had dark purple eyes, hair and when they grow in Dark purple wings. The town’s people thought Danielle, Amanda, and Sara were evil,(for they looked like the angles of death) but might be part of a centuries old legend.

 

So the legend that Danielle, Amanda, and Sara might be part of is called the legend of the dark angles. The legend is about three angels that are to save their home planet from evils worst. The angels of death. The legend doesn’t say how or when but it does say that three angels will come from out of the darkness and save their world. The girls were the only ones that fit the legends words. They are also unlike any angle that has ever been born of their world all except, him. That is how the legend goes.

 

Danielle deeply believed in the legend, but Amanda and Sara didn’t, they thought that the elders where stupid and out of their minds. Amanda and Sara were outsider because they didn’t went to do what the elders told them. They were not part of a good familys like danielle they were took to be dangerous. Amanda and Sara were good friends because both of their parents were kicked off the planet by the elder’s because of trying to start a war. Danielle wanted to become an outsider like Amanda and Sara but didn’t have the heart to leave her parents or brothers. All she could do was be friends with Amanda and Sara, which was all her parents could take. Danielle didn’t care what her parents thought about her talking to Amanda and Sara they were her friends.

 

Danielle ran out of the comfort of the green forest and into the grassy field. When she got to the middle of the field Lee dropped right in front of her. She turned around so fast her head started to hurt. When she started to run in the other direction Morgan landed right in front of her. She tried to go the other way but her last brother landed right in front of her.

 

“We have you now little sister. You shouldn’t run it just makes things worst.” Lee said with a great big smile on his face.

 

“Rule number one, never run from your emery’s. They’ll just catch up with you later.” Brett said with a mean look on his face, but with a small smile saying 'ahahah we got you.'

 

“And rule number two, if your going to run, never run into a wide open field. Ok.” Morgan said crossing his arms.

 

“Leave her alone she didn’t do anything to you.” Amanda said. As she and Sara walked out of the other side of the thick flied of tree’s that covered over more than 500 miles.

 

“What do you want?" Brett asked.

 

“Nothing, I just don’t think that you should do this to your sister it’s just mean. You all should be ashamed.”

 

“You have no business here so leave or…”

 

“Or what you'll chase after me for no good reason.”

 

“No."

 

“Then what?”

 

“Or..or I’ll tell the elder that you go to the night club every night.”

 

“Oh I’m really scared.” Amanda said as she gave Brett a look that said 'Your stupid.'

 

“You should be, now both of you go home!”

 

“Why should we, this isn’t you planet you know.” Sara interrupted rudely

 

“Note I don’t remember any one talking to you.” Morgan said very arngly.

 

“I can talk if I want to you can’t make me be quit.”

 

“Whatever.”

 

“Well you just leave…”Amanda stopped her senesce and looked up in to the sky.

 

“Well you just what?” Brett asked then doing what Amanda was doing and looked up in the sky.

 

Then they all looked up to the sky. There was something up there a ship like plane. The ship like plane went slowly over them. It looked as if the ship like plane dropped something all over the forest near the village.

 

“What is it?” Danielle asked

 

“I don’t know but I think we should go home now.” Morgan said

 

“Ok. Sara and I will go home as long as you take Danielle ok Morgan.” Amanda said in a nice manner.

 

“Ok Amanda. We will. Take care.” Morgan said in back in a nice manner.

 

“Bye Amanda.” Brett said

 

“Bye Brett,” answered Amanda "Come on Sara lets go home.”

 

Danielle and her brother headed home where the ship like plane was dropping stuff. While Sara and Amanda headed to there home in the south part of the forest.

 

“Morgan what was that?” Danielle asked her brother. As they enter the forest once more.

 

“I don’t know Danielle.” Answered Morgan

 

“Yes you do. I know you do.”

 

“I do know, your are to young to understand.”

 

“Yes I would. Just because I don’t have wings like you all do and that I’m not as old as you doesn’t mean that I wouldn’t understand.”

 

“Be quiet Danielle! I’ll tell you when your older,” then Morgan said in a low voice to low for them to hear “If we're still alive.”

 

“What did you say?”

 

“Nothing Danielle, now be quiet.”

 

“Morgan, come here and look.” Lee said very strolled.

 

“What is it Lee?” Morgan asked as he ran up to where Lee was sitting with Brett leaving Danielle all alone.

 

“Who do you suppose they are?” Brett said as he looked at the angle’s of death that were standing out side of their next door neighbor’s house like they were waiting for someone. The angle’s of death looked just like the angles of heaven except that they were dark their hair, wings, and eye’s where all dark like Danielle, Sara, and Amanda. Morgan knew they were the angle’s of death and that they were here to take over the planet. The only thing that Morgan knew to do now was to get home before the dark angles did first. He knew he had to get Danielle off the planet.

 

“I think we should go home know.”

 

“I think your right. They might be after the dark angles.” Lee said as he looked at Danielle who was standing behind them.

 

“I think your right Lee. That’s why we most save ours.” Morgan said with a wierd look on his face. Danielle had never seen tears in Morgan's eyes before.

 

“I just hope that Amanda and Sara are ok.” Brett said very sad.

 

“I’m sure their fine.” Morgan said patting Brett on the back.

 

“May I ask a question who are the dark angles and why did you look at me when you said it?” Danielle said.

 

“Nothing Amanda lets just get home now ok.”

 

“Ok Morgan I understand. Not!”

 

“Danielle, Mom and Dad will tell you when we get home.”

 

“Ok.”

 

“Amanda what do you think that was?” Sara asked Amanda as they enter the forest to go home.

 

“I really don't know, but I think that it as something to do with us.”

 

“Us what do you mean us?”

 

“You know that day that I left you home.”

 

“Yeah.”

 

“Well I went to one of the timples and read a legend about three dark angles and I think the dark Angle’s are us.”

 

“Why do you think that?”

 

“I’ll tell you why it’s because Danielle, you, and I are the only one’s on this planet that are dark around and for every will be.”

 

“Well that is kind of strange, But ok.”

 

“Well ok what. Listen what we saw back there has to do with the future and I know it.” Amanda said as she grabbed Sara right arm and turned Sara around to face her’s.

 

“Amanda how do we know that as something top do with the future. How do we know where the one’s that the elder where talking about.”

 

“Sara look at me look in my eye’s I just know. I mean whom else looks like us. We can’t be like the others. Were different you have to know were different. We look different act different, we do every thing different.”

 

“Amanda If your right then what about Danielle. Is she going to be ok and are we going to be ok?”

 

“Sara, I don’t know about us, but I do know that Danielle is safe… I hope.” Then they both looked up into the sky with some hope but not much.

 

 

“Where are they? Answer me! Where are they?”

 

“I don’t know were they are even if I did I wouldn’t tell you where they would be.”

 

“Come on elder I want to know were the dark angels are. We aren’t going hurt them. We just want them to live with us and not you. They will learn our ways and live the way we do in the shadow of evil.”

 

“How do you know the Dark angels?”

 

“Don’t tell me you already forgot about me, Jack?”

 

“JJJJJooobbb…” Jack said with a surprised look on his face

 

“Jack you look surprised to see me.” Job said with a growing grin on his face.

 

“She isn’t like you! She never will be…She is different from you. She is good.” Jake said with a look of pour terrier

 

“Who? My little sister. No you’re wrong she is more like me then you’ll ever think. We share something special we where both forced to leave the group.”

 

“She left on her own not by force like you. You tried to start a war. Which I wish you hadn’t done.”

 

“Why Jack? So I could be stuck on this planet with no where to go. There is so much more out there. But that was the old Days this is now, and now I am with the Angels of Death. In fact I’m the Right hand man of the Empire himself. When I am Empire I plan on having my sister to be by my side.”

 

“She will never fall into your hands and never will the others.”

 

“See your wrong there. I’m sure the people of this planet will join my Empire when they’re near their death.”

 

“Well see about that Job well just see.”

 

“NO Jack I will see you on the other hand will be dead by then.” Job said as he picked up Jack with one hand and took his knife out to stab Jack. “Any last worlds my old friend?”He said as he halded the knife to jacks throat.

 

“One you’ll never win. NEVER!!!!!!!!!!”Jack said before the knife hit his chest then, he was gone.

 

"Less move out, orders are to find the dark angles and kill who ever gets in our ways. Oh and clean this mess up.”

 

 

“This way.” Morgan said as they moved throw the forest to their house. “It doesn’t look like any one is home. Late me go first. I’ll wave for you when I’m sure its safe. Ok.”

 

“Ok” They all said

 

Morgan walked out of the forest to their house he looked around them turned and waved. To tell them it was safe.

 

“ We’ll go inside tell mom and dad what happen then leave. Understand.”

 

“Yes!” Brett and Lee said together.

 

“Leave to where?” Danielle asked

 

“You’ll see soon enough.”

 

They walked in the house unaware that the angles of Death had already been there. As they walked in they noticed everything was in disorder.

 

“Mom. Dad.” Danielle lauded as loud as she could for an answer from her parents. Nothing answered back.

 

“Danielle mom and Dad are gone. Don’t worry throw we now what to do.”

 

“No, you... Morgan you near seem to understand ever. All you can do is act tough.”

 

“Danielle you don't seem to know that you and your two friends put this planet in trouble danger. You guys are what the angles of death are looking for.”

 

“no I’m not.”

 

“Danielle just shut up right know ok. We’re going to earth.”

 

 

there will be more soon

 

 

Edited by: FlUtEDoRk502 at: 6/5/02 6:58:08 pm

[Guest FlUtEDoRk502]

it's great story

[Yui-chan]

Heheh. I'm not sure that you're supposed to praise your own work, but I'm very glad that you're confident enough to do so!

 

It's a very good story, 502. The idea of 'death and life' alien angels is very creative, and I hope you'll continue your plot. This is a teasing introduction, and I see a lot of potential for the characters you've created and the storyline. Well done!

 

I kind of doubt that it will surprise you if I criticize your grammar, punctuation and spelling, though. I'm kind of a stickler for such things, (much to everyone's annoyance). Are you a student or a non-native English speaker? There's a bit too much to comment on in a small post, but if you're interested in learning, I'll be glad to help you learn and correct.

 

Keep writing, and keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to seeing more of your story.

 

Sincerely,

 

~Yui

[Nyyark]

I'd say praising her own work was a good way to get an agreement =). I do like the plot. It's very interesting. I think that when you get a little bit better with your delivery, you'll make a great storyteller. I'm pretty much in agreement with Yui Temae. Good Job, give us more.

[Guest FlUtEDoRk502]

Charter 2

 

“Sara look their goes Danielle. At least we know she’ll safe.” Amanda said as she looked up to the ski at the spaceship that carried Danielle and her brothers.

 

“Yea, but what about us.” Sara said as she looked down to the ground.

 

“I don’t know, but since they aren’t shooting at them I figured that their not worried about letting one of us go. The question is why they want us and not her.”

 

“Amanda I’m scared.”

 

“Don’t be. I’m here. After I find a good place to hide you. I’ll go find out what their up to.”

 

“No. You can’t leave me. Not alone.”sara said as tears ran down her face.

 

“Sara listen to me if they get both of us then who’s going to save the world.”

 

“But you can’t leave me. I don’t like to be alone.”

 

“Sara be brave. I can’t be brave all by myself you need to help me.”

 

“But what if they get you, then what. I can’t do everything all by myself.”

 

“Sara their not going to get me.”

 

“but what if they do”

 

“But their not now shut up and hide in this hole. They wont find you here.”