jonadine Posted September 20, 2013 Report Posted September 20, 2013 Freckled grin incandescent, snub-nosed, kewpie cute it overflowed you and swept us all with you, especially me Your joy tides left their mark on me Like the seaweed limned flotsam at the beach I hear my heart clapping the game of our childhood Miss Merry Mack-ing our way to adolescence Your moods were legendary Subtle and irresistible as gravity Glossed over with the normal-flavored artistic temperament graceful natural dancer that you were, poet, snake charmer, stubborn as a steel post Your intensity was magical, genius, and I was your acolyte The day they came hangs over me like a pall, sometimes Its a jumble mostly, clone pairs of emergency workers, Wielding clipboards like shields, asking reasonable, purposeful, meaningless questions. Absurdly, I remember that in each pair, one had a mustache, and each not-twin asked me the same things about allergies, medical problems and were there any drugs in the house. There is a moment though, that lives in my head like a photo, When you were tongue twisting the shape of insanity Jaws unhinged like a snake, giving birth to a joke so huge, I splattered against it like slung mud. Memory after that is narrow and dark, They rolled you out naked as a shell-less snail, And gave me small jobs to do Packing up clothes, and shoes and toothbrushes, And suddenly, your sanity hung by a thread scattered and distracted like the prisms you kept in your window And you told me you had to do this alone And primary colors flashing, you were gone. Quote
jonadine Posted October 2, 2013 Author Report Posted October 2, 2013 Freckled grin incandescent, snub-nosed, kewpie cute, it overflowed you and swept us all with it, especially me. Your joy tides left their mark on me Like seaweed limned flotsam on the beach. I hear my heart clapping the game of our childhood Miss Merry Mack-ing our way to adolescence, I knew you, pigtails to sandcastles, and your moods were subtle and irresistible as gravity. Glossed with normal-flavored "artistic temperament" graceful, natural dancer that you were, poet, snake charmer, stubborn as a steel post Your intensity was magical, genius, and I was your acolyte The day they came hangs over me like a pall, sometimes Its a jumble mostly, clone pairs of emergency workers, Wielding clipboards like shields, asking reasonable, purposeful, meaningless questions. Absurdly, I remember that in each pair, one had a mustache, and each not-twin asked me the same things about allergies, medical problems and were there any drugs in the house. There is a moment, razored from that day, a photo that lives in my head When you were tongue twisting the shape of insanity Jaws unhinged like a snake, giving birth to a joke so huge, I splattered against it like slung mud. Memory after that is narrow and dark, They rolled you out naked as a shell-less snail, And gave me small jobs to do Packing up clothes, and shoes and toothbrushes, And suddenly, your sanity hung by a thread scattered and distracted like the prisms you kept in your window And you told me you had to do this alone And primary colors flashing, you were gone Quote
The Portrait of Zool Posted October 3, 2013 Report Posted October 3, 2013 I like it! I like it!! Quote
Brighid of Byrness Posted October 6, 2013 Report Posted October 6, 2013 The next to the last stanza reminded me of how I felt as I helped my mother go through the motions soon after my father died. Naked emotions... Quote
jonadine Posted October 8, 2013 Author Report Posted October 8, 2013 Freckled grin incandescent, snub-nosed, kewpie cute, it overflowed you and swept us all with it, especially me. Your joy tides left their mark on me Like seaweed limned flotsam on the beach. I hear my heart clapping the game of our childhood Miss Merry Mack-ing our way to adolescence. I knew you, pigtails to sandcastles, and your moods were subtle and irresistible as gravity. Glossed with normal-flavored "artistic temperament", graceful, natural dancer that you were, poet, snake charmer, stubborn as a steel post, Your intensity was magical, genius, and I was your acolyte. The day they came hangs over me like a pall, sometimes. Its a jumble mostly, clone-pairs of emergency workers, Wielding clipboards like shields, asking reasonable, purposeful, meaningless questions. Absurdly, I remember that in each pair, one had a mustache, and each not-twin asked me the same things about allergies, medical problems and were there any drugs in the house. There is a moment, razored from that day, a photo that lives in my head: When you were tongue twisting the shape of insanity Jaws unhinged like a snake, giving birth to a joke so huge, I splattered against it like slung mud. Memory after that is narrow and dark. They rolled you out naked as a shell-less snail And gave me small jobs to do Packing up clothes, and shoes and toothbrushes, Then, your sanity hung by a thread, scattered and distracted, Like the prisms you kept in your window. You looked right at me, and you said you had to do this alone And, primary colors flashing, you were gone Quote
jonadine Posted November 3, 2013 Author Report Posted November 3, 2013 Congratulations! We are pleased to accept for publication your manuscript , M13-2535, "Photographs." I found your poem incredibly moving, shockingly good, and professionally crafted. You have a great talent, and it shows with this piece. Thank you so much for sending it our way Jomeansme: squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee Quote
The Portrait of Zool Posted November 3, 2013 Report Posted November 3, 2013 Mega congratulations! You earned it! Quote
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