Harmonious_Echos Posted July 21, 2011 Report Posted July 21, 2011 Connoisseur of Air I ride In the dark cool of morning, When lone pairs of headlights Stab the sweet virgin air Filling my nose, my face, as I pedal When the clock’s hand hits five, I ride In the thick heat of afternoon, Summer sun splashing, dripping Like riding through a warm oil painting Resisting its charms, I push deep Fly through the heavy, scent-sodden air I ride In the tired arms of the evening, The trees whisper of comfort As the heat fades away, The road’s dusty tang blusters, beckons, But I take my time, loving each breath As I ride. Quote
Harmonious_Echos Posted July 23, 2011 Author Report Posted July 23, 2011 thanks. it was the first poem I've been inspired to write in forever...years, really. nice to know I can still write 'em... Quote
cryptomancer Posted August 11, 2011 Report Posted August 11, 2011 this needs far more than a like button.... it needs an awesomeness button.. beautiful imagery. love it. Quote
Snypiuer Posted August 20, 2011 Report Posted August 20, 2011 My legs are sore! Very few people can write with such imagery - thanks for being you ! Quote
Harmonious_Echos Posted June 25, 2013 Author Report Posted June 25, 2013 You're all too kind. It could still use some re-writing... Quote
MagicianEmpress Posted July 30, 2013 Report Posted July 30, 2013 Makes me wish I didn't have to work and could just ride around all day.... Quote
DL_Snake Posted July 30, 2013 Report Posted July 30, 2013 makes me wish i had that kind of air around me now Quote
Katzaniel Posted July 31, 2013 Report Posted July 31, 2013 Hm. I had read this before (and liked it) but on re-reading, I noticed this: When lone pairs of headlights Doesn't seem right. Which is it? Pairs of headlights, or one lone pair? Or is the implication that they are very far apart? Quote
Snypiuer Posted August 6, 2013 Report Posted August 6, 2013 I took it as only 1 pair visible at a time. Quote
Harmonious_Echos Posted October 23, 2013 Author Report Posted October 23, 2013 Snypiuer has my meaning--'lone' was to indicate they were 'lonely', pairs of lights for each lone car; but 'lonely' didn't fit so well... Quote
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