Snypiuer Posted March 11, 2011 Report Posted March 11, 2011 This is another one of those that I'm not REALLY sure if I actually wrote it or heard/read it or heard/read something like it. . . my mind tends to wander and I can never be sure EXACTLY which thoughts are mine and which just happen to be passing through at the time. . . either way, it's a little awkward, but I hope you like it anyways ********************************************************************************* ********************************************************************************* Take my hand and Hold me closely Feel the chill Deep in my bones Softly whisper In my ear "It's O.K. Now, you are home." Rock me slowly Kiss me sadly Wash my face With tears from your eyes Start to tremble Cry out madly Let me go Say, "Goodbye." The end has come I've done my time I've been released Left the line Soon you'll see Now that I'm gone It's not the end Life goes on Eventually You'll be happy Memories fade We all move on Just remember When the time comes In the end You were never alone I'll be there to Hold you closely And whisper softly "It's O.K." "Now you are home."
Peredhil Posted March 12, 2011 Report Posted March 12, 2011 Oooh, I like this. Good stuff. Even if it were inspired by something else - is there truly anything original? - you made it yours and shared it here. thank you!
Mardrax Posted April 21, 2011 Report Posted April 21, 2011 I just noticed I never read this, and wow, am I sorry. Like P said, originality is a myth, mostly. Every chord's been played, every word's been said, every thought's been thought. It's our job to rearrange them into something different. Something inherently ours. Or theirs. Or no one's. I love the role reversal you did here. It makes a strong story of mutual care, of kindness repaid. I especially love the lines of "Wash my face / With tears from your eyes". They make for a powerful image of cleansing through hurt and empathy. Snypiuer, my hat off to you.
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