Snypiuer Posted January 12, 2011 Report Posted January 12, 2011 I've been uncreative for a while now and decided to force myself to write to see if I can get that little so-and-so muse of mine to come back. So, here's what I got - and yes, it needs work. So any suggestions will be appreciated! I sing out loud Though I cannot sing For it lets my heart and my soul Take wing I sing so loud That I sometimes cry As I shout what's kept Deep inside To the sky I sing out loud Until I can't go on My voice broken And my tears are gone When there's nothing left I sing out loud
Appy Posted January 12, 2011 Report Posted January 12, 2011 Not sure what you think you need to work on so I'm not even starting. Just wanted to say that this resonates with something within me and has me nodding and smiling about the truth of it, so well done already
Peredhil Posted January 13, 2011 Report Posted January 13, 2011 I just plain like it. Heart speaks to heart.
Snypiuer Posted January 16, 2011 Author Report Posted January 16, 2011 Thanks! I just didn't think it 'flowed' as smoothly as it should.
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