Too Young

[Snypiuer]

This was inspired by a line from 'Book of Love' by the Magnetic Fields. Peter Gabriel does a VERY good cover of this song, but I would LOVE to her Cyndi Lauper cover it (Listen to her cover of 'At Last' and tell me she ISN'T frikin awesome) or a female with a heavy Irish brogue - more along the lines of the Cranberries rather then Sinead O'Connor. It has an awkward ending and I have a feeling it's too short, but don't see how I could smooth it out or add to it.

 

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We learned to dance

We learned to sing

When we were young

So long ago

 

Now time has passed

And with it knowledge

Of things we're still

Too young to know

 

When we were young

Our hearts were open

Too big to fill

With everything

 

But now they're small

They're hard and frozen

Yet can break from

The littlest thing

 

When we were young

We began our story

Its' beginning was

So long ago

 

And at the end

We find our story

Filled with things

We're, still, too young to know

[Ayshela]

On the fly here but one thing jumps out - it would flow more smoothly with "littlest" changed to "smallest" without losing meaning.

[Snypiuer]

Thanks, I couldn't decide on which one to use (littlest or smallest)! I ended up just flipping a coin.

 

Thanks again for the input, I appreciate it!