Preprise Posted October 7, 2009 Report Posted October 7, 2009 Today I'm a boat. Tomorrow I'm a sailor Fighting off squids, chasing a wave. Today I'm a book. Tomorrow I'm a writer Cursing and spitting at the page. I can dress the part And I can play the role. I'm eyeing the sharks. I'm eating them whole. Today I'm a goat. Tomorrow I'm a mountain. The faces of which can not fade. Today I'm a floatTomorrow I'm a-marchin'. Blowing my horn at your parade. I can dress the part And I can play the role. I'm eyeing the sharks. I'm eating them whole. When you tear away the full disguise And find the center of my illusion. I'll be far away from prying eyes Sacrificing my delusion. I can dress the part And I can play the role. I'm eyeing the sharks. I'm eating them whole.
Loki Wyrd Posted November 20, 2009 Report Posted November 20, 2009 I think you might be able to tighten up a few lines here and there to help the flow. Example: Today I'm a boat. Tomorrow I'm a sailor <====Tomorrow, a sailor: Fighting off squids, chasing a wave. <====Fighting squid, chasing a wave Today I'm a book. Tomorrow I'm a writer <====Tomorrow, a writer: Cursing and spitting at the page. <====Cursing, spitting at the page.
Preprise Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Posted November 21, 2009 Hmmm, I willl try it. I think it might not sing right though.
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