meglamus Posted May 6, 2009 Report Posted May 6, 2009 (edited) edit: shoot, I put poemS.... not supposed to be plural, sorry [mod edit] No worries about that =) As you seemed a bit upset by the mistyping, I took the liberty of editing the title for you. Also, there's a comment thread for your poem at the Critic's Corner. Welcome to the Pen! ~Tanny Hiya, n00b here lol. I did write a book.... but alot of people said it was like twilight, so I'm taking a break well, I got really upset. stressed with life etc..... WELL. I wrote a poem The song of Mr Flight The beeping softly sings me to sleep Mother at my side, please, don’t weep Soon it will be over, I promise, dear All too soon, I can not hear. Where am I now? The walls are sheet white, A name tag by my bed, deeming me Mr Flight. A song from the distance, edging nearer and nearer, All too soon, getting clearer and clearer. Heaven and earth seem so distant now, Floating in between death and life’s row. The singing angels are in my sight, Turning the day into a slow night. Goodnight sooo whatcha think? Edited May 8, 2009 by Tanuchan
Guest MoonieTunes Posted January 5, 2010 Report Posted January 5, 2010 Quite good, love the choosing of the words =)
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