Ran Yoko Posted October 21, 2008 Report Posted October 21, 2008 started putting together little bits and pieces, and voila: a new poem. might be a little awkward in spots, but it's something I dream about. "DREAMS OF FLYING" I feel like I have wings, but I cannot use them. This longing to fly, I must wonder, what will ever become of it? To feel the wind through my wings, flying through the clouds. To see the ocean spread below me, flying with the seagulls. To be able to just fly away, away from it all. See mystic sights and far-off lands and meet everyone there. Instead of having my head in the clouds, I wish all of me were there. Not constricted by laws of the earth, but laws of the skies. Sometimes I can close my eyes and pretend that I am flying. But something will always disturb me and then, I find that it was only a dream.
Peredhil Posted October 21, 2008 Report Posted October 21, 2008 glad you posted this. particularly resonated to "Instead of having my head in the clouds, I wish all of me were there."
dragonqueen Posted October 24, 2008 Report Posted October 24, 2008 Hey, I really like this. From the first line it was instantly relateable - I can definitely understand the feeling. The imagery of the second stanza was very evocative, and the rest of it followed well - you never lost me. I particularly liked the third stanza.
Vigil StarGazer Posted November 3, 2008 Report Posted November 3, 2008 I like how clean this poem is. It invokes the strongest imagry and thoughts with the shortest and simpliest words and lines. There's no one excess and nothing more needs to be added. This is indeed a work of a mature poet. Very well done.
Harmonious_Echos Posted November 7, 2008 Report Posted November 7, 2008 I like how clean this poem is. It invokes the strongest imagry and thoughts with the shortest and simpliest words and lines. There's no one excess and nothing more needs to be added. This is indeed a work of a mature poet. Very well done. What he said! I too have dreams of flying, which I've had for years, very strange thing about them, I had to teach myself to dream that way...more on that in my other posts!
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