Ozymandias Posted August 13, 2008 Report Posted August 13, 2008 Ringed round by a coffee mug long empty hampers of clothes, a chair of books, some stacks of comics, piles of dirty clothes, (oh, there are books down there too) Alton Brown is teaching again, while my computer hums and stares I take it all in as my mind wanders back again instead to the soft warmth of my bed, to the smiles I shall see tomorrow, to the phone I can pick up, the chat window that will chirp merrily at me no matter when I open it I am happy.
Wyvern Posted August 21, 2008 Report Posted August 21, 2008 Ah, here it is! :-) Thanks for re-posting this poem of yours Ozymandias, I like it quite a bit and really appreciate the heartfelt honesty that I assume lies at its foundation. I like the reference to the chat window and the other elements that the narrator finds happiness in, as there was definitely a genuine feel of comfort behind them. The descriptions of the room felt personal as well, with the comic books and Alton Brown reference standing out to me in particular... though the segment in parentheses felt a little like a side comment and didn't add much to the poem to me. Anyway, thanks again for sharing this Ozy. :-) Cool stuff.
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