Kikuyu_Black_Paws Posted June 7, 2008 Report Posted June 7, 2008 Blue is a color: Lurking around corners, Under doors and rooftops— Even to the point of silence.......
Loki Wyrd Posted June 17, 2008 Report Posted June 17, 2008 The first time I read this I didn't even notice the BLUE (I'm slow, in waves...) outline. I think there would be a greater emphasis on 'point of silence' if you ended with a single period. A more jarring finality.
Kikuyu_Black_Paws Posted June 18, 2008 Author Report Posted June 18, 2008 Thanks Loki. That's an interesting concept..I didn't think about the abrupt. I thought more of a hiss, but the stop kind of fits the blue better.
Degorram Posted June 20, 2008 Report Posted June 20, 2008 I must say this is a new style for you. You pulled it off. Tis well done.
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