Ran Yoko Posted May 4, 2008 Report Posted May 4, 2008 wrote this while I was cooking, somehow. not sure if you'll like it or not, but I'll give it a try. here goes. . . PRIDE The wind's lonely cries and the monster's howls form a mournful dirge, sweep 'cross the land. The land is barren, no home, plant or tree. Not a bird to be seen, nor a song to be sung. Oh, human pride, how you have shamed us! Enslaved, prejudiced, glorified, and now you've destroyed us! The monsters created from nightmares and dreams now all draw nigh, circle where I lay. The last of the humans in a land we've destroyed with creations and war, but ultimately, pride.
Loki Wyrd Posted June 17, 2008 Report Posted June 17, 2008 I like it. You mention a dirge, then say 'nor song to be sung.' Make up your mind. I would suggest keeping dirge, because it's a great word.
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